A Love She Did Chase

She is night

Dark hues of purple and blue

Thick dark rings around the outline of her wide eyes

She sings lullabies

Beautifully written lies

To the stars she holds in her palms

And they whisper prayers

To whatever God is listening

Wishing on them to mend her broken heart

For she disappears in the light

And morning barely knows she exists

Barley knows that she is

But she won’t admit

She’s chasing an endless fate

And I weep for her

As I watch her follow the sun

Author's Note

I'd like feedback please ^.^
I'm trying to work on my imagery.

Reviews

[Elephants & Coyotes]

I absolutely love this entire bit:
"She sings lullabies
Beautifully written lies
To the stars she holds in her palms
And they whisper prayers
To whatever God is listening
Wishing on them to mend her broken heart
For she disappears in the light
And morning barely knows she exists"

Your imagery is beautiful throughout - though, I would like to read more that speaks on/provides imagery for "she" being night.

I like how you played around with the sounds of the words.
You have a very strong voice.

Great piece.
=)

[STAR CHILD]

oh this show such beauty having great imagery and holds great wonder

[dangerbooze]

the imagery portrayed here definitely leaves room for improvement. You could even revise this piece a little.