One Last Time In The Name Of Regret

July 2, 2009

 

 

Autumn sky wept on us

as we looked up bewildered to the wetness on our faces

we were only peeling back the layers of clouds

 

With delicate fingers

our findings made our nostrils flinch

and our eyes teared remorseful to an understanding

of something beyond our power

 

The over-grown lawn scratched at our thighs

and our pupils simulated with the day's

growing shadows

 

September heaved us inside

into the muggy box we made our own

we knew nothing about each other

except all we needed to know

 

And in the swells of our bodies

we found comfort from the threatening skies

our shoulders shiny and contorted

like freshly scrubbed potatoes

 

Gauguin claimed a spot on our bed-side wall

we indulge underneath the Tahitian babes

as they watch on in sadness and understanding

while gathering papayas bare-breasted by a river shore

 

I laughed with your hand on my side

 

You grinned with a tickling mouth

 

Under the covers of a hand-me-down blanket

we made a shelter from foes and fiends- thirsting for our energy

we shook the bed to scare them away

but they peeked in at us with regretful faces

 

We turned our naked backs to them

not realizing they were the answer to why

 

we had to end

Reviews

[Tea And A Cheshire Smil..]

I love the last section, it's beautiful. I don't see any reason for criticism at all. Beautifully done.

[Leap]

Darling, this is beautifully endearing.
"Under the covers of a hand-me-down blanket
we made a shelter from foes and fiends- thirsting for our energy
we shook the bed to scare them away
but they peeked in at us with regretful faces

We turned our naked backs to them
not realizing they were the answer to why

we had to end"
This entire last section is amazing. I'm going through one by one since I haven't read most of this.

[Tim M]

I really love this one.

[Jibey]

This charmed me so much.. the images create a world of interest and variety and yet under the blanket is the comfort that sustains, the moment of pleasure that comes and then goes... I so enjoyed your writing