TREAT ME LIKE AN ELEMENT

It is for you to find out. Play with your mind. Do not be an easy thinker.

Treat me like the Earth

Keep stepping on my worth

Dig into my own wealth

Plant poisons do it stealth

Treat me like the Water

Satisfy your body in my honor

Quench the thirst of your desire

When your satisfied call me Sire

Treat me like the Fire

In my presence you shall admire

It's okay to be a liar

Play with me outside the wire

Treat me like the Air

After the heat the breeze will share

Breathing bodies in despair

Winds of love can now prepare

Treat me like the Ether

Sweet smelling reliever

Bloodless way of leisure

A liquid that can still put us in danger. 

Author's Note

Still playing with words. Hoping for reviews maybe. I am still new at this one.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love that you used one of the main elements for each stanza . . . nice composition overall, especially with the whimsical "Treat me like . . . " which is fresh & original. I also like your extended rhymes thru-out each stanza, but in a couple places the rhyme choice feels a little simplistic . . . could reach for a few more complex rhymes to enhance your meaning a bit. All in all, nicely creative & thought-provoking.

[pia]

Oh wow this was really creative and unique. I loved the words used here and the concept. Maybe in the future work on your wording and sentence structure otherwise i think its wonderfully put together and beautifully thought out and i hope to read more stuff like this from you !!

[writ rajat]

very nice to read i will treat you like earth

[Great Aunt Astri]

You do justice to the five elements. Your play with words is creative and you keep us interested, and perhaps curious abut the 'true' meaning of the last verse. Good write.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

I really like this. The way you kept the theme with the elements was very well done. Deep and passionate.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. :)

[Zephyr]

I loved your choice of words and the rhyme scheme.
Truly imaginative to write such a wonderful poem.
Great poem!

[CAPOLAVORO]

My choice of words is for your happiness. :) Thank you so much.

[Sinbulvinter]

Gorgeous way with words and imagery. I think this speaks many volumes on not only how people treat people, but how they treat nature and the world.
This is a very good piece. I loved it

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. Glad you noticed it could be in many different ways. :)

[Richard simpson]

Very creative and fast paced and rhythmic and awesome. I feel like your inventive but you're missing the emotional pace to take it easy and slow. Then rise with the balances of the rhythm and voice of the poem. It has essence and joy in it but I like it.

[CAPOLAVORO]

I like to be fast sometimes. :) I'll give another poem a try to be slow as you said then. :) Thank you for reading.

[Joey Nizz]

What a great piece, I love how you merged the words with the elements, well done this was a good write.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much Joey. Glad you noticed that goodness of it. :)

[Joey Nizz]

Your very much welcome ^^
Great things come out of ones words of writing and you proved that!