January Shadows

January Shadows

A Poem by Chris Shaw
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Father - Daughter

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What would you make of me dear Dad,
if we could share a cup of tea
and watch the sail boats work the breeze
devoid of other company?
As I pour a stronger brew, look
into your long dead eyes, would you
linger there with me? Stay a while,
smile back and say, "I love you girl
no matter what." Or would you turn
to me and say "this time my dear
you've lost the plot".
I'm older now than you were then.
How strange it seems to me in dreams
we meet and both of us are old.
How warm you are when you break through.
How cold I feel, your absence felt.
Yet when you pierce that flimsy veil
the freeze soon thaws, the ice soon melts
and I again a child of ten,
recall with glee the laughter when
stories dipped in sugar water
never end in tears or slaughter.

© 2018 Chris Shaw


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I would it's one of the best way of expressing warmth towards someone (dad) who meant everything to you, through your words. Chris!
We writers, are artists, what we can't utter through our lips, our words do it for us!
I feel so connected with my father after reading this work of yours.
Always stay blessed and keep writing Chris.

Best,
S


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Chris Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much Saga. Your thoughts here are so encouraging to me. Pleased I helped you to feel co.. read more
Saga_of_dreams

3 Weeks Ago

Welcome, ☺



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Another beautiful poem Chris! I often wonder about my father sadly I lost him when I was young too..I enjoyed reading about this poetic father daughter moment.

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Chris Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you butterfly. Sorry you lost your father so young. Mine has been a great influence on me as h.. read more
When suffering is at an end, the burden is not with the dead, so much as the living; having to carry the weight of that memory.

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Chris Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

So true. Learning to live without someone who has been so much part of your life is a heavy weight t.. read more
I would it's one of the best way of expressing warmth towards someone (dad) who meant everything to you, through your words. Chris!
We writers, are artists, what we can't utter through our lips, our words do it for us!
I feel so connected with my father after reading this work of yours.
Always stay blessed and keep writing Chris.

Best,
S


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much Saga. Your thoughts here are so encouraging to me. Pleased I helped you to feel co.. read more
Saga_of_dreams

3 Weeks Ago

Welcome, ☺
I too lost my dad at a young age, and my understanding of him and who he was made me, and now I am older than he was when I lost him, and would give anything to speak with him adult to adult. I loved this very moving.

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Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much Cherrie for your lovely review. Understand exactly how you feel. Really appreciate.. read more
How hauntingly beautiful, from the technical balance of the rhyming patterns to the permeating emotional sentiments. Last June my father unexpectedly passed away; he was 56 and I was 25. I expect that most anyone who has loved and/or lost a parent figure can perhaps relate to this at least in some small way, if not quite profoundly. What would he say, indeed, and what would I say to him now? Simultaneously I am abundant with potential words and yet seemingly at a loss to sufficiently express them. Thank you for writing and sharing. I look forward to reading more from you.

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Chris Shaw

5 Months Ago

Thank you. I have written quite a few poems about my relationship with my Dad, this is probably my f.. read more
Harmony Lee

5 Months Ago

Thank you. Likewise I am sorry for your loss even and especially with the gaps of time. I know not y.. read more
Chris Shaw

5 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind words.
Oh my goodness, my dad loved his cuppa char as he called it and i am older now than he was when he passed.
How memories seem to get stronger of much missed fathes as we get older.

Posted 6 Months Ago


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Chris Shaw

6 Months Ago

Thank you Stella. Just coming up to the 30th anniversary of his passing. Where do the years go?
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Stella Armour

6 Months Ago

nearly 50 years for mine, i wish i had taken the time to know him better , but i had a young family .. read more
Lots of poets write about visiting with someone on the other side, but this is the most interesting, original & colorful rendition I've ever read. I forget this is your father becuz it could apply to anyone. You pick out a few specifics from your childhood, but not painting the picture to be YOUR picture so much and so the reader can read whatever he/she wants to into this. I am reminded of all the times thru-out my life when I've compared myself to one of my parents at the same age. I love the way you bring up age comparisons in this poem (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Chris Shaw

6 Months Ago

Thanks Margie for that glowing review. Much appreciated. All good wishes from across the pond.
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.......................... Your first post & two years on .. it is still as good as ever .. now tho' upon the occasion of this my third formal visit .. in my head I ask the same questions .. and it becomes a very personal mother son encounter and subsequent discussion ... and for that, I thank you dearly.

Neville


Posted 6 Months Ago


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Chris Shaw

6 Months Ago

You know Neville if these lines made you think of your mum and brought her closer to have a convers.. read more
Oh I love this! Its flows so perfectly! Tell me how you did that (:
Although, I know very touching and sad as well. I had a very special relationship with my Dad as well. I often talk to him, wherever he is, and try to think of what he would say, and the conversations we would have if he was still here. Thank you for much for sharing. cheers

Posted 8 Months Ago


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Chris Shaw

8 Months Ago

Now this is my favourite poem about my Dad. We would often share a cup of tea and have a chat. Even .. read more
heart-rending & wholehearted, undoubtedly. memories of past & the childhood of gone age always wake up all up overnight and make us remember what's never supposed to be forgotten... something emotional... divine.. & mesmerizing in time.

heartfelt lines here:

"... I'm older now than you were then.
How strange it seems to me in dreams
we meet and both of us are old..."

it makes to keep it continue reading your work this evening. something raw & original i get to read after a long time.

Posted 9 Months Ago


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Chris Shaw

9 Months Ago

Thank you for choosing this old poem to read. It happens to be a personal favourite of mine. I appre.. read more

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