Stars

Somewhere

in a galaxy far, far away

up in the sky

somehow

today

on this fateful day

this long, long day

a star died

lost its life

exploded

in one last act of beauty

faded away

to greater places

to a greater existence

where its light will shine on forever.

Today, on this long and fateful day,

up in the sky, in a galaxy far, far away

a star went out

but its light continues to shine on us.

Reviews

[Amduscia]

Lovely piece.

[Tom]

I really like the concept, but I feel it's missing something although I cannot be certain what that is. I think for me it may be over simplified, I think I would like to feel the immensity of this light I see but that no longer exists and I couldn't help but think of Star Wars when I read "In a galaxy far, far away." Having said that you have opened my eyes to something I haven't approached in my own work and in this regard it is excellent, so thank you :D

[~]

I have to say I agree with Tom on this.
Good poem but missing a little something to make it explosive...

[Raven]

I love this, so simple and a great, basic but brilliant concept.