Welcome to The New World DisOrders -- They Are Legion.

 

 
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Reviews

[Gareth Hopkins]

Wow! So this is coming from the heart, huh? I have to admit, this made me laugh, not because I was genuinely amused, but because I've kind of been saying exactly the same thing for absolutely years. To be quite honest, I thought I was the only one...
That said, I have to agree wth some of the other reviewers, and whilst I agree whole-heartedly with what you're saying, you do kind of take a shovel to this one and beat the reader round the head with it, you know? From my point of view, I didn't mind (did I mention I agree with you?) but some of the 'sheep' are obviously going to have problems. Thanks for making me smile, though.

[Christina Maria]

Aside from being forced to read around all the punctuation...it was pretty good. On the down side, this essay is nothing I haven't thought of in the deep recesses of my supposed brain. I have to agree with the 'pill' issues. My doc is a naturalist and says that nature provides everything we need to survive and cure our ailments. Well...maybe not, considering the alarmingly rapid depletion of earth's resources. THAT is another essay all together. Overall, good job.

[Grendel73]

The concept of a little blue pill to cure genius is . . . well . . . genius! I love it! To hell with all the mores of conventional society! I saw let individuality reign supreme! Bravo, Carol.
A few typos here and there but the message is strong, emotional.

[Grendel73]

The concept of a little blue pill to cure genius is . . . well . . . genius! I love it! To hell with all the mores of conventional society! I saw let individuality reign supreme! Bravo, Carol.
A few typos here and there but the message is strong, emotional.

[Grendel73]

The concept of a little blue pill to cure genius is . . . well . . . genius! I love it! To hell with all the mores of conventional society! I saw let individuality reign supreme! Bravo, Carol.
A few typos here and there but the message is strong, emotional.

[Name]

I can see your point here. Unfortunatly, I think you made it, then beat it into the ground. ALL CAPS and !!? type usages turn an essay into a rant. Couple that with unforgivingly long sentences, and I'm left feeling yelled at.

If the purpose of this piece is to bring people to your way of thinking, I don't think it's effective. I think they will be scared off. If you want to send a message, slow down, make your sentence structure friendly and easy to follow, and STAY OFF THE CAPS LOCK.

[Lauren Bombardier]

I have to say that I agree wholeheartedly with the comment by Nicholas Goodman. You're making a mountain range out of an anthill.

I will say that some of the ads I've seen did seem to go too far. Why do I care if you have genital herpes? Take care of it and be done with it.

The actual writing was awful, but I understand that when you write from an emotional standpoint, you aren't always thinking clearly as you compose. Oh, and the cursing is unnecessary. You'll get a more powerful response if you are more creative.

[Lauren Bombardier]

I have to say that I agree wholeheartedly with the comment by Nicholas Goodman. You're making a mountain range out of an anthill.

I will say that some of the ads I've seen did seem to go too far. Why do I care if you have genital herpes? Take care of it and be done with it.

The actual writing was awful, but I understand that when you write from an emotional standpoint, you aren't always thinking clearly as you compose. Oh, and the cursing is unnecessary. You'll get a more powerful response if you are more creative.

[Lauren Bombardier]

I have to say that I agree wholeheartedly with the comment by Nicholas Goodman. You're making a mountain range out of an anthill.

I will say that some of the ads I've seen did seem to go too far. Why do I care if you have genital herpes? Take care of it and be done with it.

The actual writing was awful, but I understand that when you write from an emotional standpoint, you aren't always thinking clearly as you compose. Oh, and the cursing is unnecessary. You'll get a more powerful response if you are more creative.

[Carol Maric]

Jeez. Sorry. I walked away from my computer, came back and found this. How do I delete duplicate posts?

I am not going to say anything more about my own writing. Have your way with it. Thanks.