Words Burn

Your words burn a hole in my soul

trace a pathway of destruction

through the fibres of my being

 

Each word a bullet

set on its path of destruction

Aimed for the kill

they pierce my heart

tear into my flesh

leave me wounded and ill

 

You are a ghost rider

sailing on the stormy seas

of my emotions

Out to destroy

you strive to crush the spirit of life

that is within me

 

War rages within me
as I fight your vicious attacks

with every trick I know

With every beat of my heart

I resist you

with every breath I take

I move closer to victory

to escaping from the fiery darts

that fly from your mouth

with such precision and ease

 

Soon I will be free from you

from your words that sting

from your mouth that drips poison

as you smile your reapers grin

 

I will escape from your words of death

they will hit their mark no more

I wash my hands of you completely

you are rotten to the core 

Reviews

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Gosh this was intense, reminds me of a relationship that has deteriorated to the point where they know where we are most sensitive and exploit us in that manner! Partly pushing us away, partly to spite us from their perceived shame and hurt. Correct me if I am wrong?

[Carolann Dowsett]

Well yes but also about people who make a living out of destroying others with their words. :)

[Dr. Wood ?]

Hope you win in the end

My only suggestion..and it may be completely wrong...is that in the 4th verse I would leave out the words MY SOUL..Only because the word SOUL had been used before and I think in this instance it is not needed..Probably wrong though

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :) Actually I like that idea, your right not really needed :)

[Jack...]

It is sad how badly mere words can hurt.

Nice job

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you. Yes it is

[Salar Majak]

this could be such a good rock song XD don't know why i though of that :), i love the ending, how you got free of him great ending and beautiful poem!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :) A rock song sounds great lol

[Tate Morgan]

Whomever this is written to I imagine it a man has to be a wonderful lout. Oh how painful this would be if ever someone thought this of me.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes I never thought of it as this, but I guess there are a lot of people out in the world like this. I must say I have grown tired of people who use words as this. :)

[KeeD]

Raw, intense and powerful just like most of your writes this one had impact and set's an example that yeah i've taken a load of s**t in life but no more.. I'm stronger than that, i'm ready to fight back. People can be vindictive, sadistic, cynical, cruel...All hypocritical senseless tools. This speaks for so many silent voices that are to afraid to stand up for themselves. Great job Carolann

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks so much Kee :)

[The Nameless]

Yes, I really don't get why people do it either.
I hate it when random people who hardly know you insult you and verbally harass you for no apparent reason.

"As you smile your reapers grin" - i can really see the person now, smiling

Much enjoyed reading =D

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[quinfinn]

this is about rush limbereger, right? seriously, it seems anyone can damage and try to destroy others with words . wonderfully written piece about that very malady of life with other humans. we can be so vicious. excellent write.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much. Yes so many enjoy the damage they can cause with their words. Its a sad truth of the human heart.

[Baby Ricochet]

Sweetheart you gotta loose that dude

[Carolann Dowsett]

Haha nah no dude in my life I got rid of that a long time ago. This is just about those who love to use words to destroy.

[Richard Man]

The dude has gone but he left the T-shirt with that message on it. The one in the kitchen under the sink you ripped up and use to wipe up spillages.

[Carolann Dowsett]

:)

[Inda]

This is like an action movie, grabs you and never lets go, great piece!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Night]

"You are a ghost rider
sailing on the stormy seas
of my emotions
Out to destroy
you strive to crush the spirit of life
that is within me"
...broken bones heal, words go beyond into the marrow, into the very soul itself...they play over and over again in our mind...stealing the very life from our core. A wicked deep write...you are stronger my friend....God bless you.:)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much David :)

[Night]

...just got back from town...had to check in...lol. You're welcome.:)

[Carolann Dowsett]

:)