Autumn Lovers

They met on a bright November day,

When all the leaves were glowing.

Green to gold, brown to red,

Whilst the autumn winds were blowing.

They walked up a dank and dreary lane,

When the autumn rains were falling.

Mud up to their knees and chilled to the bone,

Whilst the autumn winds were blowing.

They sat atop a windswept hill,

When the autumn frost was settling.

Huddled together talking for hours,

Whilst the autumn winds were blowing.

They kissed upon a far off shore,

When the autumn seas were swelling.

Hand in hand, arm in arm,

Whilst the autumn winds were blowing.

They wed in a castle high above town,

As the autumn skies were changing.

Blue to grape and orange to crimson,

Whilst the autumn winds were blowing.

They lived in a house in the heart of the village,

Through the seasons ever moving.

Through the years, the laughter and the tears,

Whilst all the winds were blowing.

Now sadly they were separated by a twist of fate so cruel,

As those autumn leaves are falling.

Memories are the only solace,

Whilst in the autumn storms keep rolling.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

You've weaved a very solemn and melodic story with this poem. The imagery is strong, the musicality is on point (except, if you don't mind my saying, the first line of the last stanza, which appears a little too wordy for the musicality to carry over). This is simply a wonder to read. My only [other] critique is that because you have "Whilst the autumn winds were blowing" as a refrain, it would make the poem sound better and also be more powerful if you don't use "autumn" in the B lines of each stanza. You should restrict "autumn" to the refrain, for sound-wise, because you're not particularly rhyming anywhere else except for the first stanza, and not all the B lines contain the word "autumn" it would make the refrain stand out more and give it more power as well as underplay the factor that there are little rhymes or rather mere assonance rhymes (therefore it sounds better). All in all, this is simply breathtaking! Well done!