Two short poems.

Just words

                       

 Was I the one who made your smile?
Did I stir-up your hope and dreams?
Did I seduce your heart?
Or did my love make you depart my life.

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I told the red haired beauty.
I knew passion once.
Passion must expand and multiply.
If not.
You have abandoned your lover.

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                John Castellenas/Coyote

Author's Note

New poetry. I hope you like.

Reviews

[June Fowler]

The end of ur second poem could sound better this way, Passion must..........If not it will die! I hope ur not offended, just my thoght of hitting the nail on the head.

Your first poem could end with only depart, my life is understood or u could put it into brackets. U could end it the other way too....or did my love do otherwise! left for the reader to use his/her imagination.

Constructive critisesum, no offence ment.

Regards June
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[Coyote Poetry]

Can't offend me. I appreciate the honest comment dear friend.

[June Fowler]

Thanks for not feeling bad, gained a good friend in you dear John. Love to all the family at home.read moreThanks for not feeling bad, gained a good friend in you dear John. Love to all the family at home.
June

[Sami Khalil]

You focus on love with all its aspects and mysteries . Glad to read great poems with touching aspects. ...:).....

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Sami. Trying to be less epic.

[Sami Khalil]

I understand. You are welcome....:)....

[Jeannear]

I wish I could write like this....I seem to always stick to rhyming though....it's hard to branch out and write what's in my heart sometimes, but this has made me dig deeper into that...nice poem thank you :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Jeannear. I usually write epic poetry. I'm testing new things.

[wordman]

a great write john.i think we can all relate

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you wordman and I agree.

[wordman]

you`re welcome john

[Mitali Shah]

So much pain and intensity. Multiple Goodbyes. Loved your collab Coyote. God bless

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Mitali. I appreciate the comment.

[jeannemarie coulter]

perfection in word and form, except for last line of second poem...reads better if you use the word abandoned...much appreciated the images created...

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for the help and reader. I do appreciate my friend.

[Perkele.7885]

Coyote, what tense should the word abandon be?

[Coyote Poetry]

Present or past. Does mean the same. Sometime I write poetry to remind myself. Best be kind to old wife. A lot of us forget. Love need water and attention like a plant or will died. Thank you my friend for reading and the comment.

[Valentine]

Sounds like there were so many good-byes in your life. I like the people that stick even as a good friend if not suited as a match. Valentine

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot of goodbyes. Does make the people who hang around. Precious. Thank you dear friend for reading and the comment.

[Chris]

seems we always worry about being a bother to someone til the one time we really don't (because we ARE focused on them?) realize we ARE bothering ...and they are more than a little upset.

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a thoughtful way to walk through life and relationships.

[Coyote Poetry]

Love is hard when you are young. We believe always something better is coming. Sometimes it does not. Last week. I wrote 40 poems in one setting. Slowly putting them out. Thank you my friend for reading and your comment.

[Chris]

We never know how prolific we will be til we are...

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right my friend.

[Shivai]

Two pretty poems, brief and swift but with strong, deep meanings that make the experience of reading every word even more amplified, and magical.
Loved them, Coyote!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Shivai. I appreciate the comment.