Skies of Youth

 

You once again wore the skies of windy youth

Held in the temple by our roaring sea

Holding on to a call of truth

For the gifts you gave

To me

From a corner of dear evening's quiet beauty

I came to you in devoted honor

You turned your garments here to me

Again the skies of youth

Were your admirer

Expressions were pounding, no time to think

Sunlight would soon be gleaming

If this was a dream, I refused to blink

I wished to stay here

In my dreaming

Who would be so cruel as to wake me now

As I adore the skies, you wear

Let the sun shine upon another brow

For now we climb

The stairs

Author's Note

*Artist CARLOS ORDUNA BARRERA

Reviews

[lee von cleef]

Twice I read, For I love the beauty, the surface, glides, to near enchantment.Then I blinked, and carried a darkness into this poem, there have been several people in my life I raised to pedestals so high , only to see them turn to pet raccoons ,kicking me ,down and away,or worse.Freida, what a wild life.I hope this poem is enchanted not incestuous.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you Lee :)

[Poison Ivy]

this is soooooo good!

[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

A fast read that is in every sense flawless my talented friend.
Your work will always flow to me in that velvet dream like sense great post neva cheers gonzo

[Eloha]

This has a spiritual sort of beautitude ! bravo!

[Rob Santana]

wow, you expressed youself very well. I especially like the line "if this was a dream,I refuse to blink" Awesome choice of words there...

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

Thank you IBA........:)

[Kes]

This really great - the rhythm is amazing. I love it.
"I refused to blink and I wished to stay here in my dreaming" - I love this line! Reminds me of me. :) A kind of naive determination... I love it. :)
Great work - as ever!
K

[afra]

Wow so beautiful .....great write

[Pól]

Again totally beautiful. A poignant message, powerfully put. I hesitate to make even a small suggestion, but here goes; i would drop the "were" first line, third stanza. For me, & this is totally subjective, that would improve the beat of the line & make it more dramatic.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Absolutely incredible piece, beautifully expressed. Love it.

[Lily Mae]

I refuse to blink and wish to keep dreaming.. hmm this is so connected to my dreamers heart.. :) I love it Neva.. xo