When She Writes About the Rain

When She Writes About the Rain

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Sitting in the garden where one finds love in those eyes that speak of alone.

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There is a massive distance
between her smile and tears
when she writes about the rain.
Because her faded dreams
put her mind at ease
behind the places
where she stands
in pain.

Sitting in the garden
where one finds love
in those eyes
that speak of alone.
She writes lines
which intrigue mysteriously.
You can see her words dance
where she's walked,
when dawn breaks
across the trees.

The inner deepness of her words
hold on to each cloud,
crying out to the depths
of our bones.  
They tell us our worst hours
contain the time outside
of her faded dreams
and that they too.....
will soon be gone.

When she writes about the rain
we smile
behind the places
where we stood in pain.  
You can see her words dance
where she's walked,
knowing......
they never speak
in vain.

© 2012 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Artist *Anna Zero

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you know, Neva, every time i read something you have written about my favorite subject (love) it is as if an angel were sitting at my side telling me how to infuse your words into my being, and it always come to me naturally how to feel deep inside . i've heard of horse whisperers, dog whisperers etc. BUT......you are definitely the love whisperer ! your art is amazing and almost perfection. thank you for sharing this with me

Posted 8 Years Ago


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This is so beautiful :) Really had me for a moment. Brilliantly put up! :')

Posted 7 Years Ago


brilliant..as always !

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

7 Years Ago

Thank you Arabdha :)
Very compelling, makes me want to read more about what she says, I love all the symbolism in this or metaphors? I always mix those up, but like where it says "her words dance where shes walked" that has so many different meanings just in that one line.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This poem is what can I say, a very beautiful and profound write, thanks for writing this~!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with quinfinn. Your words weave magic and reach deep inside the mind and soul of the reader. It has been a long time since I logged in WC. But here I am again, glad that I did not miss out on such a magnificent poetic work.

Keep writing. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

8 Years Ago

Thank you Enigmatic Soul, good to see you.
Words dance in the rain;
discipline, talent, practice
within their beauty.

So glad you share your pas de deux with your poetry here, Neva.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

8 Years Ago

Thanks Bear, can I have this dance?
Joel M Frye

8 Years Ago

Anytime.
Very beautiful. I loved it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

8 Years Ago

Thank you :)
A very beautiful poem Neva. It's one of those that when you read it ...it instantly brings calm!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

8 Years Ago

thank you Becky.
Breathtaking! I loved the line,"where one finds love in the eyes that speak of alone." Full marks!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

When she writes about the rain
we smile
behind the places
where we stood in pain.

those lines are brilliant...like syliva said..."readers want to hear it from someone who has been there and felt the worst"

and reading of another's pain, maybe that makes ours not hurt so much...there is camraderie among poets...the rain and the tears a bit hard to distinguish from each other.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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