Final Battle

Pains of anguish strike a chord with notes that ring off key........

There are such tears of battle fought in gain
Torn from the weary eyes
From hearts ensnared in unrequited love
That will never die

Pangs of anguish strike a chord
With notes that ring off key
Each time the heart returns to battle
To try again to be

Now battle-scarred and weary worn
Not sure of how to mend
Still the heart returns each time for more
Goes on fighting ‘til the end

What fine glory found in battle fair
With hearts of equal measure
That meet and duel on common ground
And win their final treasure

Reviews

[David W Moore III]

Love as a battlefield. I've always been slightly irritated by this metaphor and the implications. But you do it well here. I particularly like the musical references (I do them a lot as well and think It adds great depth) you do a good job of evoking feelings, a prerequisite of mine for good poetry.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Your write reflects a universal emotion; some expert estimates say feelings of love that is not reciprocated or understood affects 98% of all people during their lifetimes. I certainly had a connection with this piece!

It’s a great share and an exquisitely creative composition.

Phillip

[Jeremy Wyatt]

So want my heart to get ensnared, halfway there but who knows? Guess all will slip by, but this spoem didn't slip by :o) , so grand and stridently written I can imagine a bard reading it out to earn his, HER I mean to say, meal ..great stuff x

[fargone]

this is excellent, neva. a little different for u as well, i think. beautifully written, as always. the poem may mention unrequited love but ends with optimism. there must always be optimism. great write, my dear friend.

[Lily Mae]

Hearts ensnared in unrequited love... says it all for me.. ;) I'm trying to picture the final treasure ;) xx