To Impress

To Impress

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Delicate nets collect on sailing clouds of violet mist, while red leaves twist and spin in turn............

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Delicate nets collect on sailing clouds of violet mist

While red leaves twist and spin in turn
Gleaming sparks of dawn cannot be dismissed
As the scattered night sky
Is adjourned

Sweet water gathers in a dream’s own reflection
On a whirling spider’s silvery thread
Morning has broken needing no authentication
See her truth glowing there
In an intricate web

Tiny stones are surrounding sharp blades of grass
Worshiping the presence, they behold
Looking up from the shadows of a looking glass
With their own stories
Still untold

A leaping bass, splashes proudly in a silent pond
Each drop of water expressing its distress
Thinking that the sun was waiting to respond
To his shimmering silence
Used to impress

A single drop of water, a red leaf twisting in the wind
A spider weaving her web to be blessed
Even the tiny stones worshiping their friends
Leap with the bass distressing the pond
To impress

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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This is a glittering chain of precious stones; a beautiful description of a day's birth, that special time between dark and light, the was and will be. So many wonderful phrases, ' .. Tiny stones are surrounding sharp blades of grass ~ Worshiping the presence .. ' such a gentle but clear scene.

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You were sitting at a pond when inspiration struck, am I right?

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This poem has such a spiritual energy to it.
You've given me an indescribable feeling of peace.

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beautifully invented prose that resides on golden pond, the imagery is dream, your words flow as the warm mist you so describe, insightfully soft and soulful.


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I think I agree with Joel. This strikes me as a wonderful prayer using nature as both the worshipper and the worshipped--Thank you so much--nice to red this near the close of my day!

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A worshipful nod to the quiet sacredness of nature and morning, dressed in the Sunday best of your immaculate imagery and delicate phrasing. Thank you, Neva.

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such a lovely description of nature at its finest!
great write neva!


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Im far too late its all been said ... great write

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I love the imagery and imagination you've taken into this. Your poems are always so calming and captivating to read, and I enjoy them all. An amazing write, I can truly relate to the serenity, but the little twist intended in the end. I really loved the last stanza, and the lines:
"A single drop of water, a red leaf twisting in the wind
A spider weaving her web to be blessed"
Magnificent write! :)


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Just lovely Neva, You weave your magic through nature here. :)

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amazing!! beauty in it !

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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