Steam - Respite In the Essence of Air

Steam - Respite In the Essence of Air

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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She watches in pleasure as you push away all............

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She filled your air pretending to be life-giving water

Now you know that she is fire
Clouding your vision of the world around you
She traded your dreams for her desires

She watched with pleasure as you pushed away all
To give her your undivided attention
Finding fault in every move that you made
Leaving you with no honorable mention

Her warmth and beauty holds you under her spell
Stubbornly calling your thirst benign
For what now seems like forever a day and a year
Yet,  of her life-giving water there is no sign

Now you find yourself longingly staring into the air
Seeking a tall cool glass of respite
To quench your thirst and refresh your dry spirit
Restoring your dreams to your sight

Continue seeking life-giving water with great patience
Breathe in with the utmost vigilant care
In a vessel of a warrior fearless and wise
You will find respite…………
In the essence of air

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


Author's Note

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
not everything that is beautiful to the eye has your best interest at heart

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Ahhh... Such a powerful message in this one Neva; one we would all do well to learn. All that sparkles is certainly not gold. You wrote this with such a perfect portrayal from the Vileness' perspective. I could almost here her utter "Muahahaha" under her breath as she bleed him dry; even taking great joy as he forsake all else for her emptiness.
Brilliant!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

11 Years Ago

Thank you Veronica, I had forgotten about this one
Veronica Chandler

11 Years Ago

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She sucked the life right out of him! A favorite!

Posted 12 Years Ago


WOW! Neva, I really enjoyed this one,
Loved that pic. This is a pondering well thought out write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow Neva, I know this isn't your usual style. You have touched on a chord that divides, but we are too stubborn to understand.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This femme fatale pulled her finger in a "come here" motion, in my imagination as men stepped forward...one after another...fell to their knees and placed their heads into the guillotine. You bring back vivid memories of personalities that have changed in the wake of love.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Neva, sometimes your poetry, as beautiful as it is, is hard to read. Sometimes I can't extract a message from it because such lyrical imagery fogs my senses and clouds my mind of understanding. Yet? I could easily dissect your message. You made it much easier for the reader to get what you were trying to say. I am definitely grateful for that. :3

A beautiful comparison to that kind of situation to water and steam. I never would have thought to have compared those things to facades. Very interesting, as always.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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You describe this so well. I have known many a people in my life. You have pegged them very well. Really great flow. : )

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

loved it..

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

outer beauty can be deceiving... and some do use it to get what they want, I've know a few like this, even be taken by one of them never again.


Her warmth and beauty holds you under her spell
Stubbornly calling your thirst benign
For what now seems like forever a day and a year
Yet, of her life-giving water there is no sign

Nicely worded.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Stirring poem. Got to me from the start. An underlying current of anger blanketed with love and lust for what could have been.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Some people just want. And want. And they're selfish. Yet others give them what they want because they're beautiful. It's not fair, but that's society for you.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 11, 2011
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Tags: air, deceit, breath, poetry, selfish, self-serving

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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