Effervesce

Filling and fading with a soft caress
My playmate by the deep
Our memories diminish upon effervesce
Held up the sands of time
They keep

We bind and softly lay them all along
Like small sparks of fire
Out of the mist they are burning strong
Held closely to our soul's
Deepest desires

The dusk of evening, breaks into light
Filling with a soft caress
Memories are found in clouds of night
In the lovely surging foam
Of effervesce

Those sands of time will unbind the fires
My playmate by the deep
Found in our soul's deepest desires
The smallest spark
Will keep













 

Author's Note

*Artist - Victor Bauer - http://www.victorbauer.com/art/beach.htm

Reviews

[Larry Dyson]

really like this part...it rolls well off the tongue.."
"Filling and fading with a soft caress
My playmate by the deep
Our memories diminish (upon) effervesce
Held (up )the sands of time
They keep"

relating to being held by time..held up what do you think?...not correcting just playing withthe turn of phrase.. hope you feel free enough to do this with my writings as well...?

[brenda]

beautiful neva love it !:)

[Art]

So many thoughts can be felt within this view of not only Mermaids but of the reflecting upon memories and there repetitive embrace of our minds...they leave those small sparks embedded waiting to re-appear...nice work Neva

[Muse]

I get bored with cliche story's about fairytales, but I don't get bored with mermaid's. I think both men and woman will forever be enchanted by these beautiful creatures. They encompass both mystery and desire. The term "playmate" made me smile, this is appropriate perhaps to best describe the love of a "siren".

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Stunning use of words you posess a skill for that is aspiring indeed :)

[Lily Mae]

This is just so beautiful Neva..xx

[manchilld99]

Your imagery is as sharp as ever. At first reading I was thrown off by the rhyme scheme. But once you find how thar works, it sets a nice rhythm.

[VelvetRosetta]

Beautiful Neva, I love the way you used your wording, it sparked a beautiful image!