Life in a Red Dress

There is a woman in an expensive red dress, and she is crying. Is it out of fear? Joy? Anger? Is she sad, hurt or  upset? But then a man steps in front of her and it all becomes clear.

 

6 o'clock rolled around and there he was, waiting at the door for the one person he couldn't live without. Slowly the door opened and out she walked, wearing a gorgeous red dress. He complimented her then led her to his old, beat up car. They joked around on the way to the restaurant, laughing at the stupid things he did that day. She commented on the ink stain on the front of his shirt then let him ramble on about how he had broken the printer at work. Finally, they had arrived. He parked in the closet parking ploace becasue she had refused to let him drop her off at the door. After placing the car in park, he quickly ran over to assist her out of the car.

 

Once insde, they were seated at a table located in the back, by his request. She sat, he stood. "Take a seat, darling." she spoke in that voice that stopped his breath every time he heard it. Smiling nervously, he clumsily knelt before her. He took her hands with his shakey ones and looked deep into her eyes. Then, he released only one hand to grab th ering in his pocket and spoke, "Marry me." As if he had practiced it more the the seventeen times he had already. Tears formed in her eyes as she whispered, "Yes." Then they flowed, forming tiny streams running down her face. He slowly rose, still slightly shaking, and poured some champagne.

 

There is a woman in an expensive red dress and she is crying, because the man that she loves will be hers forever.

Reviews

[Warrior]

Great story telling. This did justice in the realm of getting the message across. Great message. There's lot of times where a story can have a great message to aim for, and have a lot of under lining things but then no one gets it, and if no one gets it, then the point has failed. But in my opinion this did well to get the message across. You made it clear, which is why I think it's good. Keep up the good work. What was also great was that I could imagine the story as I read it, and that is also a strong point of stories. The ability to have the reader imagine it because after all we're reading not watching it, but it was as if I was there as I read this, and that is great. Great visuals and great story telling. It had plot and substance. When you add substance to writing it gets that much better. It gets the reader hooked on it and make them feel as if they are part of it. As long as their is that emotional connection between the reader and the story then it's good. The connection you were able to established in the writing gives the reader a sense of comfortably that they are in tune with the writing. So that way when the writing is over, the reader wants more, and wishes it didn't end.

[soliloquy]

Oh...this is sweet! I kept reading intently since I was thinking something horrible was about to happen.....a murder....a betrayal...something like that. But i was pleased to read the end...

Very nice...

[SenoritaAriii<3]

This is very interesting, I really like it!