you, again

i found your voice

                walking so quiet              

through my mind

                last night

 

in whispers

                you smiled at me

everything was broken

                and we laughed at our lovely mess

 

my hands seemed to dance

                slow

                quiet

                never still

                moving across the mountains

                                to you

searching still

                to fill the in between

this quiet, love

                this quiet is no void

 

we were full, then

so full of us

                i could almost read

the notes

                of your laugh

rising up to meet me

               

tentative left

                with that first kiss

when all we could taste

                was truth

                on our lips

 

souls so old

                when we first met

all we could do

was stare

                and study

and grow young

together

 

 I still dance

                every time i open a door

to find your smile

                walking so quiet

inside my mind

Reviews

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Complete beauty in word form...delicate and wistful lines strung together in perfect harmony. With each stanza palpitating the heart, breaths catch within, with each enchanting line. Mesmerizing write, enjoyed with all my heart.


"I still dance
every time i open a door
to find your smile
walking so quiet
inside my mind"

amazing... just utterly beautiful.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Yep I knew I had already reviewed this one...this one is amazing. One of my Favorites, of yours. :)

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you so much....two times, thank you ;)

CM.

[Horizon K.]

when all we could taste
was truth
on our lips

I have to echo Corsets comment below... There are just a handful of poets on here that you hope, someday, you will see a love poem spring from... The elegant and gentle way you walk through your words, yes, you are one of them... Seems I just missed it before, but anyway... Utterly lovely, CM...

[Corset]

I have always been of the opinion that if you wanted to write a love poem no one could match it, I'd swear I hear the flowers singing in this and the wings of the hummingbird, thats just how captivating it is. excellent poetry this, so lovely. Between you and G.o.d. I'm not sure which one breathes the loudest. gorgeous this is.

[ChemicalMadness]

you're far too kind, corset. i love that you connected with this piece and I'm always so grateful to get any kind of feedback from my readers - it means a lot to me!

CM.

[Corset]

my pleasure always, who doesn't love to read beautiful poetry?

[Cool Handless Luke]

this is filled with a vulnerable honesty that one cannot escape without at least a twinge of guilt for not having shared in a little pain along with you.

[Shane William]

Your words are so honest. And they just hit home as they may for many other people. But, I've written such things that if somehow personified, they'd look at this writing as if through a mirror.

Ironically, I have a poem called Again, you. It's an early post, take a gander if you've the time.

[Ken Simm.]

This is wonderful. It follows the depth filled caverns of something that sounds like a spirit visit or a dream relationship. I love the old souls touch. Exceptional writing.

[End.]

love the way the poem's enjambment is staggered...it sways...so it reads like a dance move. I can feel the speaker's movements. very nice.

[OBWhiteHawk]

Really lovely, great work. I love this part: souls so old

when we first met

all we could do

was stare

and study

and grow young

together

[Leica]

Beautiful words you have written.. your closing lines are wonderful!
reminds me of my favorite poem by Frank O'Hara, "Animals"
http://www.frankohara.org/writing.html

[ChemicalMadness]

thanks so much for commenting....I'll check it out!
CM.

[ChemicalMadness]

I just read it. i probably should've capitalized my "thanks".....that is a HUGE compliment.

[K. Louis]

This is beautiful. Your metaphors are breathtaking. "With that first kiss when all we could taste was truth on our lips" "Souls so old when we first met all we could do was stare and study and grow young together" You take feelings here that are so relatable and put them into words so eloquently. Thank you, your work is inspiring!

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you so much!