Time Bomb

.....i don't think i should have published this....

Reigning in it all, I'm afraid I'll become numb

Fear of rejection, a flood of love, makes me dumb

The worst part is that I have so much self-control

That empty feeling, that utter darkness in my soul

I hid it, in recesses of my constantly moving mind

Without it, I can think, but it's so hard to be kind

You, with your great powers of psycho-analysis

Can you look into my blind eyes, and see this

It's kind of funny, when I wake up and you are not there

Because you've never been and I doubt you care

It's kind of sad, to love who will not love me back

Why? Is it my personality, my face, what is it that I lack?

It's kind of strange, when I want to see you smile

Simple, really; you're happy, and that holds me for a while

It's kind of stupid, when I'm not able to even speak

But these words come out, week by week

Author's Note

This is a very personal poem, and at first I was unsure if I should let it go free.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Love is hard to find and harder to hold on to.
"It's kind of funny, when I wake up and you are not there
Because you've never been and I doubt you care
It's kind of sad, to love who will not love me back"
I like the old saying. If we try. At least we attempted. Nothing as bad as wishes and hope that never saw life or daylight. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Chidoriflower]

Unfulfilled dreams are quite sad; fortunately I no longer regret having them. Maybe I'll think over things before I pursue certain people. Thank you for the review!! It is much appreciated :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

Woa
This is amazing
Faved it!

[Chidoriflower]

tehe~ thanks!

[WordlessFacade]

This is amazing, I loved it. I can't wait to read more. =)

[Chidoriflower]

Thank you!! I wasn't expecting so many reviews! Awesome. :')

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

I love this poem, brilliantly written. :-)

Kaze~ :-)

[Chidoriflower]

heheh thank you so much! ^^

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-) :-D

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

I think you've achieved two things here.
Firstly this is a great little poem. Clever use of words.
Secondly I think you needed to release this beast.
Don't ever think you're not worthy of someones love. ANYONE who does not return the love they receive isn't worth it.
Poetry can be a great release for pent up emotions.
Great Write.

[Chidoriflower]

I appreciate your review very much. Thank you.

[Angels heart]

this poem is... spectacular. (had to find the correct word) the words flow with the feelings that pour out. i love this poem. I'm glad you put it out, and i bet it will be worth it too. ;)

[Chidoriflower]

Heh thanks

[MBUYISA]

I liked the rhyme in your writing
You did a very good job and thanks for sharing again

[Chidoriflower]

Thank you. :)

[Miranda Richard]

I am so glad you published this, it's great. However, I feel that your syllables are too much at times. Just my opinion. I look forward to reading more :)

[Chidoriflower]

Ok. Thanks ^^

[Aethereal]

Your lovely poem inspired me to write this gift poem for you to keep as your own:

Love's a Minefield

It’s better not to love at all,
than to hurt the one you love.
Love may not be love at all
if it comes with push and shove.

Love is such a strange emotion.
Don’t drown in its deep blue ocean,
Why court drama and commotion?
Try to quell this hot devotion.

If you don't resist at all,
you may climb too high to fall.

[Chidoriflower]

Thank you so much. :)

[Akashi]

You never told me you wrote 100 new poems! You didn't even send me any read requests! I'm missing everything!

[Chidoriflower]

I SENT YOU REQUESTS. And you didn't even come on writerscafe until recently. T.T I missed you...

[Akashi]

I'm a busy personnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn!

[Chidoriflower]

Busy with what? SPACE MARSHMALLOWS?! O^O

[Akashi]

No. I have to use my brain in other places besides mars.

[Chidoriflower]

How dare you. It is Venus. Not Mars.

[Akashi]

Oh- ok. . . .