Under the Nose

Under the Nose

A Poem by Chidoriflower
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my teenage rebellion lol

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Why couldn't I look under my nose
The important cause of my woe
You made me the monster and I believed you
I carved my skin and plucked out my eye to please you

So can you say you love me still
When I'm living, disregarding your will
You can't chain me down, I swear I'll be free
Because I love her and she loves me

Even if she's gone I'll always be in the wrong
At least I know what's been killing me all along
I'll find hope and maybe it'll be in the same place
Right in front of me, or under the nose

© 2016 Chidoriflower


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Great work, expressing the retrospective viewpoint. Multitudes of personal circumstance may lend themselves to the narrative, making the advice universal. So often we search for something out there, when it was under our nose to begin with. Love this.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chidoriflower

2 Years Ago

Thank you for such a thoughtful review :) You hit it right on the head



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Great work, expressing the retrospective viewpoint. Multitudes of personal circumstance may lend themselves to the narrative, making the advice universal. So often we search for something out there, when it was under our nose to begin with. Love this.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chidoriflower

2 Years Ago

Thank you for such a thoughtful review :) You hit it right on the head
I think it would have more feeling if you didn't use weird slang. The title kind of turned me off and it took me a while to get it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Chidoriflower

3 Years Ago

Oh. The title isn't slang, it's an idiom. Thank you for your review ^-^
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Solid piece about despondent feelings and the incessant sense of inevitability.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chidoriflower

3 Years Ago

You hit it right on the head. Thank you for the review :)

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Added on July 28, 2016
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Tags: under my nose, im a monster, personal shiz

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Chidoriflower
Chidoriflower

R.I.P, CA



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I love reading, from YA books to classic English literature. Writing is my vent usually. I'm gay as hell. I like food, anime, videogames, and traditional dances. (Like waltzing, salsa, west/east coast.. more..

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