Falling Apart

this is why i wanna be a physchiatrist :)

Your mind slips away

More often now than ever before

As you finally go insane

Your daughter already called

And they're coming to get you

Tomorrow

Or maybe today

You'll never know.

 

The insanity eats you away

You've almost decomposed completely

The walls are suddenly stained red

With the blood that masked his face

On that cold December day.

Your feet talk to you

The door is your only friend.

 

You scream at your plate

When you don't want to eat

You scream at night

When the "monsters" feast

You're going crazy

It gets worse everyday

As you slowly fall apart.

Author's Note

this is like one of the longest poems I've ever written, all credit goes to Marilyn Manson's This is the new *hit :)

Reviews

[Chamil3001]

hmmm?

[SilentDreamer]

Funny, ironic really. Great job. :)

[Katie]

Great write. The descriptions you have literally painted a movie in my head!

[Matt]

haha pure genius. i like how you perfectly described how i feel most of the time... jk lol

[Alana Michele]

It's a cool poem, but it would have be more interesting if you didn't state they were insane, til the end. You could have gone through the actions and then said somethind about"your mind drifts away"

[Sci-Fi]

This is beautifully written, it's excruciatingly edgy, i love it. My favorite part is the line "when the "monsters" feed",when i read that it was so awesome! Keep up the awesome work. Bravo!

[DELETED]

I love this :]

[Cassandra D.]

This was very good.
Dragged me when i saw the first line.
Thanks for sharing.

[Bexfinch]

It was perfect. I loved it.