Piranha Butterflies.

I saw you walking past my house yesterday

instantly, piranha butterflies flooded the lining of my stomach.

flipping it over and making it churn.

forcing me to remember the nights the s**t hit the fan

splattered everywhere, and left us to clean it up

with fake apologies and light hearted lies.

I swear I could blow a hole straight through to the other side

of what you think you know about me now.

I could recreate your thought process,

bring your knees to the earth.

We could start over, and just forget.

But then you turn around and spot me on my porch

earphones in place and laptop where it belongs

you give a smirk that could kill a kitten

and the piranha butterflies vanish.

Maybe I just had to s**t.

Reviews

[ASHLEY]

I love how you incorporate it into a story its great!

thanx for review!

[kitty_kelley]

Lol, I'm not sure if this is supposed to be funny, but I laughed anyways... This is a great piece.

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

I love this piece!!
I love the story & how it ends!
It's like saying u don't really mean enough for me to feel that way so "Maybe I just had to s**t"
AMAZING!!!
I'm not sure I intepited it the way u meant it but I got saticfaction out of reading it!!
Love this piece!!!

[Wisconsin]

I like it.
I'm not very good at reviewing poetry, though.
So, all I know how to say is I like it.

[Joseph - Michael]

Damn, that was quite an imagination you got there and I seriously enjoyed reading it throughly. I mean, who would've thought of this "Piranha Butterflies" words. Also, you sure as hell got some quirky sense of humor for using this line; "Maybe I just had to s**t" Very funny as hell, yet very impressive...

So, it's all really great tho...

[Rainbowco]

Floored!

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I love this one, especially the last line!!!! Well said!
Ralph

[Hviske]

Awesome awesome awesome like it makes you think the butterflies where the kind of butterflies you get we u see that one person but its not like that ...you have no idea the last line blew my mind .. good work

[Stephen Ownby]

"Maybe I just had to s**t". Brilliant. Way to make the reader do a complete 180. Some of the lines are a little trite, but you are kind of playing with the tired expressions like "s**t hits the fan".

[Hedra Helix]

last three lines are ffin killer. over all its as solid as Ive come to expect;)
dope