Love

Love

A Poem by ChristianM

You're beauty stops my heart, it swallows up my words
Too angelic for imitation, too unique for comprehension
Like sunshine, I long for you the moment you're gone
Sailing the sea, you're my anchor, my guiding star home
I live and run this race, always to find true love's embrace
You're with me always, in day, in slumber, a bond which none can tear asunder
A match heaven made, my love for you will stand forever, never fade

© 2010 ChristianM


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The subtle rhymes actually work to create a piece with a smooth flow and good voice. Also, it sounds spontaneous and effortless in its declaration of love. The message come across, strong and passionate.

Keep Writing. ^___^

Posted 8 Years Ago


I would be careful with some of these descriptions they come off as a bit trite. Try working with your metaphors and imagery a bit more, but you can always work with poems over time and develop them.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Beautiful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This was really good. I can totally relate. :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Jon
"Youre buety stops my heart, and swallows up my words
Too angelic for imitation, too unique for comprehension"
Its got a really good flow, and good job with getting your emotions out. Notice you write alot of sailing, sad to say but its a dying art form. I learned how to last year and just cant get enough it! Anyways good job;D


Posted 9 Years Ago


This is a heartfelt expression of deep, deep love. I like the use of metaphor.

Posted 9 Years Ago


O my God!
s**t, the feeling, the rhythm, the poem!
I have read it about 10 times or more! and every time I read it will be a picture up .. a picture of what describes this poem!
S**t! I'm totally shocked!
I really liked it! Super nicely written! remain so!

K-roo

Posted 9 Years Ago


great job i really liked it! (;

Posted 9 Years Ago


You put so much emotion in this and used perfect imagery to describe your love for this person. I can really tell how you feel about this. Very romantic and beautiful great job! I loved it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

it's nice...great job

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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