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A Poem by Daniel Atkinson
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necessary depression.

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i'm looking at the world
through a pair of you-colored glasses,
and everything's gray.

only that's not the best way to describe it.
more like a wretched-smokey-nothingness
choking-me-on-its-sour-dejection
kind of color,
but gray is so much more simple.

i hate the way this feels,
my stomach of butterflies turned to bats,
so you can't call me a masochist.
but without these you-colored glasses,
i'd be so...
blind.

© 2011 Daniel Atkinson


Author's Note

Daniel Atkinson
A bad relationship that I went through. As horrible as it was, I found it impossible to leave her.

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Love is indeed the poison that keeps us alive. But it is only when we let go of that poison do we die, only to be saved by another vial. Thus the course continues until one is content with the toxicity of their romance.

Yea, I really liked your poem. I've been in a relationship like that. But eventually you left her right?

Posted 8 Years Ago


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This was really good.
You descriptiveness is fantastic (:
My favorite bit is "My stomach full of butterflies turned to bats"

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this. It's creative yet a bit sad. You better watch out for those Britts and Canadians though, they might scold you for spelling "color" like an American. Lol. Great write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

im a big fan of the tons-of-words-strung-together-to-make-one-big-adjective thing. you did it here to perfection.
isn't it strange the way people color our worlds. always makes me wonder what color i am in theirs.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think you captured that very well. Excellently done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very good poem i have been in a relationship like that to . i am sorry you went through that but there is a reason everything happens at least thats what every one says lol

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Through a pair of you-colored glasses,
And everything's gray. favorite line
good job

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love is indeed the poison that keeps us alive. But it is only when we let go of that poison do we die, only to be saved by another vial. Thus the course continues until one is content with the toxicity of their romance.

Yea, I really liked your poem. I've been in a relationship like that. But eventually you left her right?

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice write! like it

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow this was really good! I love the imagery you put in this.

~Erinne

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 6, 2011
Last Updated on May 16, 2011
Tags: depression, relationships, love, hopelessness, gray

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Daniel Atkinson
Daniel Atkinson

Atlanta, GA



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