Remember

Remember

A Poem by Comatose

Remember the day that you two met

the train tracks bridge,

the rain so wet.

Remember back to your birthday night

he held your hand,

made it feel so right.

Remember when you first brushed fingers

the electrifying jolt,

that endlessly lingers.


Remember again your first kiss

The snow biting your cheeks,

Your mind thrown into bliss


 

Remember all those times together

hold onto them,

and make them last forever.

Remember; leave no room for regrets

let it go.

Remember... then...

forget.

© 2010 Comatose


Author's Note

Comatose
This may seem like one thing, but it's actually about another...

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This is very nice, Great job!! Its very beautiful :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


wow this is amazing, it made me think about things lol :) great job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Beautiful

Posted 14 Years Ago


You have an amazing talent!! x
Love the poem!! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


when i read this, i get a depressed vibe from it. like even at the beginning. dont get me wrong, its really good and i like it. its just sad. you know? great job though! its really well-written in my opinion. (:

Posted 14 Years Ago


I think its about loosing and remembering someone.
but maybe im wrong..
great poem. i think it shows allot of potential in your writing skill..
I don't really sense allot emotion tho...Try and throw yourself into your work.
It will capture your audience from line one and make your work feel so much more heartfelt. great work.

Posted 14 Years Ago


another piece of work that blows us away..i love it :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


you have a beautiful talent

Posted 14 Years Ago


Well, I remembered those feelings I had once before, and I wish to experience them again. And you are very right, it is something completely different. Good sense of feeling, describing, and thought. Then you turn around and throw them away. I guess in some cases that may be true, but feelings should always be cherished.
~A very good poem.~

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Comatose

Twin Falls, ID



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