Transform my Thoughts into a Canvas

Transform my Thoughts into a Canvas

A Poem by Comatose

Help me to transform my thoughts into a canvas,

Maybe then my emotions will become clear.

The words never seem to embody what I wish to say,

The phrases always fall short of their intentions.

The harmony of the rhymes collide,

And run together like the pigments of a ruined painting.

So hard I try to unify the colors,

To perfect each and every stroke of the brush.

I wish only to illustrate my passion,

To display how deeply and helplessly in love I have fallen.

So help me to rectify this misshapen mess of acrylic and oils,

To take my brush of tongues and somehow create a masterpiece.

For you, my love, deserve nothing less. 

© 2016 Comatose

Author's Note

This was kind of thrown together, but there was alot of effort put into the meaning.

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Added on October 26, 2011
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Twin Falls, ID

I write poetry and stories, which is obviously why I'm on this site. I just want some good criticisim and other people's thoughts on my writing style, simple as that. more..

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