Kiss Me In The Rain

Kiss Me In The Rain

A Poem by CourtneyShay

Kiss me softly

Walk me out the door in the rain

Baby kiss me in the rain

Have me looking up at the sky

Thanking God for this moment

Kiss me in the rain baby

The rain drops and your kiss me

I will go breathless

Hold me arms tightly

Kiss me in the rain

Make me beg for more than just a kiss

Help me a make a better memory for the rain

 

 

© 2012 CourtneyShay


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Good poem, but I think there may be some typos in here. For example, "The rain drops and your kiss me" should most likely be "The rain drops and YOU kiss me". Also, "Hold me arms tightly" should probably be "Hold MY arms tightly". Just trying to be helpful :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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The rain and the sweet kiss. Can create a good memory. I enjoyed the thoughts and the ending. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lovely write .

Posted 8 Years Ago


..That's great , it seems you are enjoying being in the rain and in love too. And this is clearly reflecting in your poem...Very beautiful poem :-)

Posted 8 Years Ago


nice, enjoyed the anaphora of the title, just like in old ballads you've written a nice repeated verse and a story split in "scenes" divided by it, if you worked just a little more on the metrica and the sound of the words that'd be a nice ballad :)
hated the "hold me arms" instead of "hold my arms" but that's poetic license, otherwise no anaphora of "me" stressing who "takes" the actions of the protagonist

Posted 8 Years Ago


love it!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Short but simply brilliant. This is actually some of the best poetry I've read in a while. I know it isn't much help but then again. Keep going! (:

Posted 8 Years Ago


very interesting piece. I liked it :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


I love this... such love in this!! beautifully writen!!

Posted 8 Years Ago



Sweet. Full of passion.

Posted 8 Years Ago


A really lovely poem, so sweet. However, there are some places were you maybe need a comma, or some other sort of break. Also I noticed a few minor typos, but nothing that subtracts from the meaning.

Anyway, I love the atmosphere of the poem! :D

Posted 8 Years Ago



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hartselle , AL



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Hi my name is Courtney i am 16 ummmmm i have amazing friends and an amazing boyfriend.I write poems and songs.I love to sing and be around friends more..

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