The Border Line

This is rather dark..

I don't know what's going on with my head,
Sometimes I wish I were dead.
I'm all alone, now.
I'm on my own, now.

Somedays i think I'm losing my mind,
I swear I'm running out of time.
And everyone keeps growing sly.
I don't know who to trust at night.

Yet my father thinks I'm fine.
And my mother thinks I'm on the border line.

My heart is pounding like drum,
I feel like I've been drinking rum.
My instincts are telling me to run,
But I hear whispers begging me to come.

Closer and closer,
They draw me near
Until they're shouting in my ear.

And I know I'm all alone now,
I know I'm on my own now.

But my father thinks I'm fine.
My mother thinks I'm on the border line.

Yes, my father thinks I'm fine.
My mother thinks I'm on the border line.

And as I feel my heart rate bounce,
The shadows all begin to pounce.
The darkness begins to keep me in
And I know that it's my sin.

I am being swallowed up,
There is no youth left in my cup.

And yet my father thinks I'm fine.
But I do know, I'm on the border line.

Author's Note

I'm not sure how this came to me, but it did :) I hope you enjoyed!

Reviews

[Sam Hush]

Its beautiful...
Its rather dark but i think its what really close to you...
It felt like defining the reality behind everything.

[Cool Girl]

Thank you so much :)

[1Disawsum]

Wow so captivating! Love it, well done! I'm always here for you :) xx

[Cool Girl]

Thank you very much!

[McBear]

I really liked how you showed the difference between your father and mothers thinking. Parents often think differently. But as you know, I am here for you and will help you with anything. :)

[Cool Girl]

Thank you so much :)

[wordman]

no place to run,no place to hide, from all these crazy feelings i have inside

[Cool Girl]

Good rhyme! Lol :)

[WittyWonka]

You write like a seasoned poet. This is great!

[Cool Girl]

Thank you very much! I appreciate your time :)

[WittyWonka]

You are welcome. :)

[zunie frost]

fantastic work !!!
i love the idea !!! anyway nice poetry !!!
And yet my father thinks I'm fine.
But I do know, I'm on the border line.
i like these lines !!!
keep it up

[Cool Girl]

Thanks so much!! :)

[zunie frost]

welcome !!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I actually enjoyed the way you penned this piece, when the whole idea was to depict the hundred of storming ideas in the head!
It's dark because the narrator is very afraid of the whirlwind inside her.
I enjoyed this amazing piece, strangely I can even relate to it! Reminisce of my teen years hitting me back.
Great work!
Rating: 96/100

[Cool Girl]

Thanks, Jyoti! I really appreciate it! You're the best :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Awwee! You very welcome, COOL gal!

[McBear]

Cmon Jyoti, she deserved a 100/100 :P

[Cool Girl]

Lol thanks nick

[Willard Wells]

My daughter calls it noise with the information overload she receives from her brain and I have just accepted it for being what it is. Lots of thoughts and ideas racing around. Well penned fun piece.

[Cool Girl]

Thank you very much :)

[Aehr]

The repetition adds to the dark feel of the poem. I love the line 'There is no youth left in my cup.' Good use of words. :)

[Cool Girl]

Thank you very much :)

[andrew mitchell]

I had to switch the the lights on to read this dark poem! No I didn't A nice flowing write CC.:0

[Cool Girl]

Haha thanks, Andrew :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thats okay Oh! Dark Writer! Say hi to stephen King!:):)