Most Recent Dream

One of my more morbid poems. Still I think that it has a nice moral to it.

 

Dead bodies lying

All around me

Their blood

Seeping into the ground

Who could have done this?

Was it possibly me?

I am holding a sword

Their blood on the blade

How could I have done this?

Is it really true?

I pinch myself

And soon wake up

From that most recent dream

Wait…

Was it really just a dream?

Maybe there was more to it

Something more like a vision

Warning me of things to come

Things that I can change

I don’t have to be that person

The one that kills them all

Just make sure

That I do not do

Anything to hurt

The one I love

Reviews

[xX-tito24-Xx]

Ok, I LOVE your style of writing, very psychological and not in the boring text-book way.

I think everyone can sort of connect to this poem, as everyone, at one point or another, has looked around them and realised that they've made some big mistakes, and possibly hurt people along the way, and we can all imagine ourselves hurting the people we love, and feel helpless to stop ourselves.

nothing left to say but BRAVO XD

[Flame DM]

o.O sounds so eerily like my eerily like my character in Blood Suckers. Once again your able to connect with the reader's emotions. You brought chills down my spine and I loved it *two thumbs up*

[Liam]

I really like the uncertainty of the speaker, and the un-resolution of the poem. Well done!

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A dark poem, but very well written. It almost sounds as if it takes place in the Scottish Highlands, so many times through history battles numb the mind to ease the pain, releasing into a dream.

[Windy]

Interesting read, I like how you wrote like you did it then left us wondering if it was just a dream. Good read, thanks. :)

[Jessica{is inspired by ..]

Wow! Tht must have been creepy and eerie at the same time. To have to wonder if you could have done such a thing, even in your dream.

I like the realization you have, that you don't have to be the one who harms. Dreams can be useful things, they can change our perpective, forcing to look at where our actions may lead, thus causing us to either want to change it our embrace it.

I thing in the first line it should be "laying" not "lying" dead things don't lie...usually.

Overall, nicely done. the coloring fits quite well with the topic.

Jess