Evalyn Dear

This is a poem came completely out of nowhere. I debated how I should end this poem so I'm going to put the different endings side by side on the bottom. Please comment and tell me which I should use

Evalyn Dear, 

Evalyn Dear.

Why do you have to be so sad?

Evalyn Dear,

Evalyn Dear.

Why is life so bad?

Evalyn Dear,

Evalyn Dear.

Why did you let him go?

Evalyn Dear!

Evalyn Dear!

Why can't you hear me?

Evalyn Dear!

Evalyn Dear!

Why did you run away?

Evalyn Dear!                                           Evalyn dear,

Evalyn Dear!                                           Evalyn dear.

Why do you have to be so sad!?                Why do you have to be so sad...?

Author's Note

Please comment on which ending I should use, I will wait a week after I post this to get comments and see which ending I do use. =)

Reviews

[Violeta]

The one on the right suits better in my opinion, but depending on how frantic the narrator is about Evalyn, the ending on left could work as well. Good use of repetition, loved this one :)

[_]

Yeah I think you should use the second one :D I like the tempo of your poem and how it goes from calm to exclamation, and it would end the poem with calmity once again showing that it starts all over. :D Great Poem though I really like it though. :)

[Rose of Gondor]

I like the second ending better.............. A great poem. ^.^ Awesome.

[Mehul Rwat]

The second one seems better, though even if you use the 1st it will still be nice. A good piece of work...

[ecept]

so good, they are both ths same or do you mean the one above? which ever i like this write.