Only a dream

Only a dream

A Poem by Dakota

See the faces of the fallen
Lost in support of this cause
Supression fire loud on the left
No decision is without flaws
Fear and blood
Like sucking on a penny
Gunpowder and sand
The last scents known to many
A startle and a quick jump up
Awaken with a scream
The sheets on the bed are soft and inviting
Only a dream, only a dream.

© 2011 Dakota

Author's Note

Here's my second poem ever. I was challenged to use the senses.

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register


That was awesome:) Dakota

Posted 9 Years Ago

I found this scary. You are a great writer.

Posted 9 Years Ago

Wonderful job with the senses. I was thinking about how it truly brings you into this world in it's few lines, and now I know why.
Favorite line had to be "Gunpowder and sand
The last scents known to many"
Horrifying, heartbreaking, and eye opening all at once. Bravo lady

Posted 9 Years Ago

This dream is awakened by a scream. A splendid poem...:)..............

Posted 9 Years Ago

Masterly crafted i truly enjoyed your writing.

Thanks for sharing

Posted 10 Years Ago

i love it good job

Posted 12 Years Ago

This was terrifying and visceral. I admire the honesty. The imagery is strong. Thank you for sharing this.

Posted 12 Years Ago

A truth to us all that happily we are reminded of our humanity

Posted 12 Years Ago

A succesful shot to capture and image and run with it ti a typical end.
Liked it alot

Posted 12 Years Ago

Scary! But I think you succeeded in letting the reader know what you were trying to pass through.

Kaitlynn =)

Posted 12 Years Ago

First Page first
Previous Page prev
Share This
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


27 Reviews
Added on June 16, 2010
Last Updated on October 6, 2011




I'm a thirty year old mother of eight homeschool wildlings (ages 14-3), and the wife of a Marine grunt I met the way one usually meets grunts: at our first duty station. I don't write like a girl, .. more..

Prologue Prologue

A Chapter by Dakota

Blue Falcon Blue Falcon

A Book by Dakota

Blue Falcon- 1 Blue Falcon- 1

A Chapter by Dakota

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..