Only a dream

Only a dream

A Poem by Dakota

See the faces of the fallen
Lost in support of this cause
Supression fire loud on the left
No decision is without flaws
Fear and blood
Like sucking on a penny
Gunpowder and sand
The last scents known to many
A startle and a quick jump up
Awaken with a scream
The sheets on the bed are soft and inviting
Only a dream, only a dream.

© 2011 Dakota


Author's Note

Dakota
Here's my second poem ever. I was challenged to use the senses.

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That was awesome:) Dakota

Posted 9 Years Ago


I found this scary. You are a great writer.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wonderful job with the senses. I was thinking about how it truly brings you into this world in it's few lines, and now I know why.
Favorite line had to be "Gunpowder and sand
The last scents known to many"
Horrifying, heartbreaking, and eye opening all at once. Bravo lady

Posted 9 Years Ago


This dream is awakened by a scream. A splendid poem...:)..............

Posted 9 Years Ago


Masterly crafted i truly enjoyed your writing.

Thanks for sharing

Posted 10 Years Ago


i love it good job

Posted 12 Years Ago


This was terrifying and visceral. I admire the honesty. The imagery is strong. Thank you for sharing this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


A truth to us all that happily we are reminded of our humanity

Posted 12 Years Ago


A succesful shot to capture and image and run with it ti a typical end.
Liked it alot

Posted 12 Years Ago


Scary! But I think you succeeded in letting the reader know what you were trying to pass through.

Kaitlynn =)

Posted 12 Years Ago



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