Only a dream

See the faces of the fallen
Lost in support of this cause
Supression fire loud on the left
No decision is without flaws
Fear and blood
Like sucking on a penny
Gunpowder and sand
The last scents known to many
A startle and a quick jump up
Awaken with a scream
The sheets on the bed are soft and inviting
Only a dream, only a dream.

Author's Note

Here's my second poem ever. I was challenged to use the senses.

Reviews

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

VERY WELL WRITTEN!

[Crow]

The long lasting thought of a battle scarred soul, that haunt us in our dreams.

Well done.

[KatiePie]

This whole piece is so enjoyable and I love how you use the senses, it's great it creates perfect imagery for the reader. Great write!
-Cathrine

[Taylor H.]

I'm making up for reviews I haven't returned. So you may get a few from me depending :). OK, I loved this poem. There was a time when your rhyme and flow fell apart but you picked it right back up at the end. This was a wonderful poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is strong. Your beginning lines create visions of blood and guns. I have known a few men who would awake screaming from nightmare of blood and guns. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Michael X]

NOW THAT IS TALENT....I mean what more can I say?
well I can say I really liked the original concept and your natural line breaks
and its clear to see this as a battle scene in Irag or the like.
you did such a great job. I've read this five times

[Daydreamer54]

Nice rhyme scheme here and I bet having to be a solider and watching ppl die around you is traumatizing. Great write here!