My mask

A mask is to worn till the hereafter..

I used not.......
to hide my face...and shot.....

every word that longs to come out......
I used not ........
to worry a lot........
about every spring feeling that erupt......

As long as ....from now....till hereafter.........
every part of me wore a mask.....
even the laughter........
cold and harsh words..........comes out..........even softer......
feelings relinquished and squeezed to death.
in my heart......comes out....stronger than a fighter........

My mask lingered......sneaked.......and worn......
every piece of joy in me........torn.......
I feel it with every breath......mourn.......

Hopes to get rid of.....
but still all my crying.....I'll do in the rain.......
that washes my tears turn them to vain........

Modesty I mastered.......
While my honesty fade.....scattered......
I can't recognize myself anymore.....
as my mask holds on to me , down........down to the core.

Reviews

[Jack...]

I believe we all wear masks from time to time...to hide our emotions...to keep others out...to shadow our fears...and at times to disguise how we really feel. Removing these masks at times seems tedious, though often extremely rewarding. Once again a grouping of scattered verses that reached my inner core. Thank you for sharing.

[Dalia]

Its great that my free verse style of writing is attractive to a creative writer as yourself, that's an honor :)

[Jack...]

The honor is all mine, I have attempted to write free-verse on several occasions and can not seem to grasp it completely. You are very good with it.

[Dalia]

A friend , who is also a poet told me so, I guess this is the only style I know actually, but your style is perfect!

[Jack...]

Thank you, I feel the same about yours

[jacob erin-cilberto]

made me think of the same song as john mentioned--

the rain washes away my tears, and no one can tell that i am really crying...

i like the idea of getting stronger inside...even if on the outside they will see what they want to see in me.

jacob

[Dalia]

Thank you so much Jacob
Really glad you like it
always love to read your reviews :)

[Deron Alexis]

very good concepts in this one very well done the way the mask edits every thing before its available to the public

[Dalia]

Exactly !
thanks Deron glad you like it :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Lines in the fourth stanza awakened memories of an Art Garfunkle song 'I'll Do My Crying in the Rain'-lovely song. This was interesting and I think we all wear masks from time to time and situation to situation. See my poem 'Masks'

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Passion8/1025195/

[Dalia]

Thank you John, am ever so humbled, thank you for reviewing :)

[LA Lorena]

If we allow our true selves to be masked, we eventually cease to be ourselves at all.

[Dalia]

You are right
But the masks are worn in certain times and do not cover our personality for good, not that I like wearing masks, am just stating a fact.
Thanks a lot for your review LA Lorena , how do you find my style of writing ?

[khalid]

i can feel the conflict between what we want to do and what we are allowed to do. i think this is due to culture and traditions specially concervative ones in an open free world..i liked it

[Dalia]

The conflict and the difficulty to show all whats inside us to the outside, so we have to wear masks, either not to hurt others or ourselves.
Really glad you liked it , am new at writing and your opinion makes a difference

[khalid]

your writings look too nice to be new. i hope you the best

[Dalia]

Thank you, am happy you think so , hope you the same, have a bright day.