Darkness

Really dark for me

Lungs collapsing
Shortness of breath
Looking up to
Darkness
No where to look,
No where to turn,
The only thing visible
Is darkness
On the edge
The edge of death
Hanging on by a thread
The devil's waiting
Hoping, watching
Until you fall
Into the darkness

Reviews

[chandlerl]

I agree with the last reviewer a moment of hopelessness is very well described, it relates to your readers in the fact that everyone has had that moment where it feels like the world is just so utterly hopeless and you'll never crawl out of it, this poem greatly describes that, you did a fantastic job and i look foward to reading more of your work. Lovely, keep writing and i'll keep reading =)

[Tasha]

Thank you very much for the thoughout review I agree. I will keep writing, thanks again.

[Layla Night]

I really love this piece. It is truly amazing.

[Tasha]

Thank you very much.

[Tavionna]

I love themes like these but i dont like Satan.

[Tasha]

Me either, thank you.

[Tavionna]

your welcome =)

[Tasha]

:)

[Samuel Dickens]

Yes, it's quite dark. A moment of hopelessness, very well described.

[Tasha]

Thank you very much!

[Ahmad Cox]

Very strong

[Tasha]

Thanks you!

[Fang]

wow i love this poem

[Tasha]

Wow, thank you!

[Black]

Wow,,, quiet impressive,
I love the emotion the piece gives me... it's so cold and frightning and real.
Good job

[Tasha]

Thank you very much!

[Rob Santana]

Haha nicely done Tasha.

[Tasha]

Haha thank you Creeper that means a lot from you.

[Frieda P]

Ouch, that was deep to go with my morning brew. Very brooding, deep, and affecting. Like I got kicked in the gut. To the point for sure. Nice yet unsettling.

[Tasha]

Oh wow Frieda, I hope I didn't mess up your morning brew. I appreciate the review.

[Frieda P]

Nah, I love a piece that moves me, so Kudos...it was just dark, I take my brew with cream. :-)

[Tasha]

Thank you...I don't normally write like that. I need cream too :)

[Frieda P]

hahah :-)

[Tasha]

Hehe :) thanks again!

[Frieda P]

welcome, sometimes we surprise ourselves with where we can go with our own writing...

[Tasha]

I did surprise myself...

[Frieda P]

That's a good thang. ;-)

[Tasha]

Yeah ;-)