A Different Side of Me

A Different Side of Me

A Poem by Tasha
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Guy's perspective of being cheated on

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I loved you,
I loved you more than life itself,
I gave up everything for you...
the lies,
the games...
everything... for you
and this is how you repay me
by cheating on me!

You are my life's greatest treasure,
I don't want to see our rock of love
crumble into a simple piece of granite
I had the freedom to love you as I pleased,
but you took it away from me
and captured it in a hive... that can never be replaced
no matter how hard I try,

You're enslaving me in your whorish ways... making me one of "them"
I don't want to be that,
I just want to be with you
but I can't leave
the boundless attempts to break free from your bondage
is engulfing me...

Making me want to scream out loud "I HATE YOU!"
but I could never hate you,
and you know that...
because I love too much to ever despise you
for what you did, no matter how hard I try

You are my one true companion...
that I never want to lose



© 2011 Tasha


Author's Note

 Tasha
Dancing with words prompt.

We had to use the words: boundless, granite, enslaving, treasure, hive, loud freedom

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You are my life's greatest treasure,
I don't want to see our rock of love
crumble into a simple piece of granite
I had the freedom to love you as I pleased,

I just really loved these words here,
I know half of these feelings quite so well.
Well written write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Wonderful use of the words given to you! You incorporated them beautifully and kept me entranced the entire time!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love it..you did a great job with it as a whole. :)xx

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh the ways of youth in years to come you will look back and laugh at the follies your loves fed

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good job incorporating all those words in this! That was some challenge! Nicely done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That was really good. I don't really read/write poems, but I really liked that

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

good job turning foul feelings into something of greater substance.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very powerful, I can feel the anger and confusion in your words.
And I gotta say you used the words very well.

I don't want to see our rock of love
crumble into a simple piece of granite

^That line stood out to me the most. Love it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great poem! It's hard to write a poem using those words, yet you did it very well. I especially liked the lines 'You are my one true companion.../that I never want to lose'. Good job!
~Aurora

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you are really good with words kepp writing!!:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

masterful line..You're enslaving me in your whorish ways... making me one of "them"


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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