She Thought it was Love

The title says it all.

She thought she had found Mr. Right,
and everything would be alright,
but she was wrong
then  her world started to fall

She thought she had found the one,
 one different from the rest,
who understood
all that she talked about

She thought she found love
when he said
that she was the only girl for him,
she believed every word,
she hung on to them for dear life
like a fish helplessly hanging
onto a hook

But she was left
sad,
and alone
flip flopping her feelings
with   the one she loves...

She thought she was in love,
but it seemed like she was the only one
in love...

Author's Note

A friend was telling me about her problems about being in love with a guy and he didn't seem to love her back. This feeling sucks, and I gave her some advice and then I wrote this.

Reviews

[Andrew - Moon Fixer]

Okay. this is a good piece, but it needs work. First the Sentences they need to flow. This needs help...
(but she was wrong
then her world started to fall)
Okay try this...
(she was wrong.
Her world fell a part)

Now this part take a look...

( She thought she had found Mr. Right,
and everything would be alright,)
There is nothing wrong here but one thing. It Rhymes. The thing is that the rest does not I was expecting that all of it rhymes, ether all or nothing.
I am a victom of this myself. let's try this
( Mr. Right, she believed she had,
Thinking that God has blessed her.

But she was wrong.
The day fell to night. )
Take a look at this. I look forword to reading this again.

[Lily Mae]

I'm sure she appreciated your friendship and this poem..xx

[Kiari Sabon]

not bad

[Lively]

Nice poem.

[Lizy Coale]

(: unrequited love, the bane of so many people's existence. i thought the flip-flopping was a little bit unclear, maybe because i live in florida so i was like 'oh flip-flips, shes leaving?' and that wasnt what happened lol. but a good poem all the same (:

[Audrey Howitt]

Sad, but again, great poem!!!

[silentpoet]

very beautiful and so real that many of us know this feeling. sad but true these days not knowing who we can trust or believe in to love us back..nice work..

[LOver]

Well i can say i know howe she felt and its not a good feeling it breaks your soul in two, because the thought of you being in love with someone who totally feels the exact opposite way kills evey strong inside you:) she's not alone. .

[mi-chan]

i really like this poem; the wording was amazing and the feeling behind it was definately expressed =) nice job!

[Brad]

your friend is right...love in its genuine form is hard to come by outside the unconditional love of a parent...but it is out there...it's just hiding

[BlueberryKisses]

This is really good, I like this :) we all can relate to this, good write