Uncaged Raven

I lost the key to paradise in a dirty drain of horrid place.

Taken from center stage

My dark buried with psychological emotions

Now lives, locked inside the basement of my mind

Piece by piece it’s destroyed

Emotional acid rain cried out

But your yellow umbrella protects me

I wanted to start over but

Now I just want to move forward

With you…

I want you to feel special

Not just a face in the crowd

Your voice soothes my mind and soul

If I didn't have you, I couldn't see a future.

You play with the risk of being pinned down

Our love would never fade

It can’t be broken

And it can’t be ignored

The vast depths of my inside urges for you

You are a handpicked by all the goddess to

Lead the world’s beauty

Your eyes are stunning sapphires

That I can stare directly at my bare soul and you love it

Your golden yellow untangled hair drops

As a veil over your pale but a full of life face

Your touch is like a grace of a wonderful angel

Your large fast beating heart is mine

And I would never leave you behind

Your lips linger there, taunting me with lust

I have screw up so much in bloody and dark world

I have made a lot of mistakes but you were never one

The tastes of blood that used to fill my mouth,

Was replaced by the taste of you love

The smell of a rotting corpse of a man

Is disposed of by your warming smile

You saved me. You were there to pick up all the pieces.

You fought for me. And you never even blinked.

My words were wasted on dead

But now I live for you and the chance of us

I would say a billion words to make sure I have you,

But you simply want to hear three

I.LOVE.YOU

And I will always and forever feel love you and only you

My last breath is yours.

Reviews

[PaperLife]

THis tears and fades in and out but never leaves an ounce of emotion behind. it's bold and screaming but so painfully torn. But in the last sentence nothing but life is made inside of the death of those words.

"You fought for me. And you never even blinked."

I love this line. i don't know why but I do. I love how your words are like an ocean that flows so rapidly out like love pouring straight into the heart of the one you love.

You paint a world with love and feeling inside of these words. It was broken and scattered but in the end is so soft and loving. Its light is like nothing else. So beautiful and endearing and there's this feeling of your strong devotion and love really just really coming out as the story of words unfolds so kindly. Your thoughts are beautiful and capture my heart so elegantly. You have a way with your words and thoughts, so beautiful. I can't tell you how beautiful these are.

[CHRIS ANDES]

perfect ending
=]

[Odayin]

You, my friend, are one talented writer. Indidnt think it was possible to include so many links to reality in your writing. Each one of your pieces is like taking a voyage into your mind where you slowly reach us how each one of your separates slowly brought you down and unconvincingly got the better of you. No worries though, it's quite clear you stamped a return print on their weapon.

"The smell of a rotting corpse of a man
Is disposed of by your warming smile"
This line is perfect. It describes the whole base of the operation and what true power is capable of in the hands of--not a monster--but a friend.

[John F Carver]

Yeah, I know the ladies like this stuff. Are you really that lucky to have one who does and yet so miserable. What is that Reaper? Fear? If it is true love you'll know it. No fear in real love, you sense it.

[SkrillexLover :)]

I really like this! :) good job

[Eve Brown]

Aw, this is sweet :)

[Morrigan Nicole]

God, how I understand how you feel. In a sense anyway. My favorite line: " I have made many mistakes but you were never one"

[TKBickel]

So many brilliant unique lines, very powerful. You are becoming a really good poet.

[Matt "Mickey" Denney]

I like this emotional piece. There are so many writers that will just write anything and then submit it but I can tell that you put a lot of work and thought into this. Thank you for sharing! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"I have screw up so much in bloody and dark world
I have made a lot of mistakes but you were never one"
A haunting tale in this poem. The story was dark and you held my attention to the last words. Thank you for the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Elisabeth]

Our love would never fade
It can’t be broken
And it can’t be ignored

And I will always and forever feel love you and only you
My last breath is yours.

Oh my, oh my... I'm speechless