Yet to be titled

Yet to be titled

A Poem by DarkShines

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Your static groans

Fill my head

Your silent screams

Echoed by the dead


Blink if you can hear me


The shallow beeping

Conforming to one

The lights go out

One by one


Speak if you can feel me


They march in single file

Delivering a final package

An electric shock being the style

As breathes are held


Rise again if you can see me


No more contractions or expansions

Dead eyed and still

No more decisions or distractions

Silenced by an unseen will


Lie back and sleep if you've left me



© 2011 DarkShines




Reviews

Whoa, this sent shivers down my spine. I really like the tone of this poem and the last line a lot.

Posted 11 Years Ago


sorta depressing... but very good:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very dark, very cool. Nice work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Morbid and fearful, yet elegant, described with a complexity and twist, from a well thought conception.

Posted 12 Years Ago


your writting amazes me.. i love it!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very well written, I LOVE the whole dead yet alive feel of this write.(Metaphorically and physically) I think maybe this write should be named with an 'undead' spin to it. Perhaps it should be named "Alive In A Coffin" or something like that. But anyway superb write!(But then again, you've never disappointed me with any of your writes.)

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 12 Years Ago


Awesome, you don't read enough, um, horror poetry? Is that a genre? Anyway, this was really, really good.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on October 22, 2011
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DarkShines
DarkShines

Spokane, WA



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Well I write mostly poetry lately, I have a horror novel I am currently working on called Glasgow Smile, that is what I am trying to work on the most right now. My main genres are horror and science f.. more..

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