Stalker

Waiting, following.......

Stalker

At first

I smelt the scent of your perfume…

Cherry-chocolate burst

Sweetly intoxicating the whole room

 

I breathed it in slowly

Each breath sweet and looong

The pleasure it gave me felt so wrong

 

It took me a while to find the source

I saw a wedding ring on your finger

Undressing you with my eyes as if you were divorced

 

You strut around the room in those high heels

Every step you take causing the firmness of your hips to be prominent

My eyes crawl all over your body like hungry, feasting eels

 

Eventually the evening comes to an end and I can follow you home

I wait for you outside in my car eager to get back to your place

You climb in your car and leave, my car follows you like a father scared to leave his daughter alone

 

Eventually you pull into a driveway and float out of your car

I switch off my engine a few houses away so as not to scare you

Into your house you disappear and after a few hours all the lights within go dark.

 

It doesn't take me long to climb into the window

My bare feet make no sound as they touch the cold tiles of your kitchen floor

I creep up the stairs ever so slowly

I didn't see your husbands car in the driveway so I know you alone, and I don’t want you to be lonely

 

The bedroom door creeks open as I gently push it open

I can just make out the bed in the darkness

I get closer and closer to it

Each step quickening my pulse, I pull something short and straight out of my pocket

 

A loud piercing scream cracks the tranquility of the night

It takes me only a second to realise its mine

Your hands are around my neck

Squeezing…

My screams turns to laughter as I turn around and gently kiss you.

Oh how my baby loves role playing

 

Bongani Armstrong Mhlangu

Reviews

[Loner]

What a clever twist to the poem
really enjoyed it......

[Miguel]

Ha! Very clever :)

You captured the anticipation well and I was certainly very tense while reading this - I almost wanted to shout out to the lady to watch out!
The twist at the end is great; even the beggining standing alone is very well-written, but the end just adds that special touch.

I was literally laughing out lound at school with y friends looking at me like I was crazy. :)

Great write!

~Miguel

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. You gave me a surprise ending. I like the fear and mystery of the poem. I like the positive ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Gazza]

Another one with an unexpected twist at the end, Good stuff, keeping the standard high.

[afra]

i like the twist in the end ...well done

[Dark Tower]

Thank you Afra. You always give positive feedback, much appreciated.

[afra]

no problem ....i always enjoy ur work

[Junert]

Role playing it is.

[Lisa Ring]

What did you pull out of your pocket, huh? lol I was really disturbed at being inside the mind of a stalker and I was dreading the end. But you gave it a happy little twist at the end. Very effective and well done.

[Dark Tower]

Its a slab of lindt chocolate, but I couldnt figure a way to mould that in there, so I just leave it to the imagination of the readers. Thank you. I thought a happy ending would be more appropriate.

[melissa's heart]

B.C. this is a little on the erotic side. You descriptionsvery clear that you are not concerned with her marriage status, which I find quite bothersome. But the poetry is spot on.