Damned to sin

Damned to sin was my idea, however I would like to think Dr. Rick Puetter, for helping me with the story line and choice of words. ~S. D. Blankenship

I wrote this for you the one I knew,

but now I'm Damned from you too.

And now true love is lost with pain,
Damned am I and she is my bane.

You left me for someone that's new,
Damned am I, my dreams I eschew.

We loved this way every day,
Damned am I, loves most feeble prey! 

You laughed as you ripped out my heart,
Damned am I now that we're apart.

You are impaired most fleshly lust,
Damned am I, my passion now rust. 
 
I loved you and only you alone,
Damned am I and bereft my throne.  

For you alone my heart doth ache,
Damned am I, how my world doth shake. 

I miss her smile, her lips, and eyes so blue,
Damned am I that her love was not so true. 

I have great pain while she is well,
I know I'm damned, my life is Hell.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Chi Italy]

Ah I see a love issue approaching.....the reason you feel like this, is precisely because you feel and that is the key to being human imo. We have to take the rough with the smooth on our journey, sometimes it is hell on earth and then again sometimes it is pure bliss, an emotion I am wiling take the pain to have again and again....Luck in love to you, Tai

[cfix]

Simply Awesome my friend.
I really enjoyed this piece, it pulled me in the moment to feel it.
Very well written and expressed.

[OT]

brilliant poem! a great read!! poetically subtle and lighthearted!

[Michael X]

This poem captures love with a lyrical and reciprocating quality to boot,
its a gem of a read, poetically and lightheartedly real, awsome job!

[Chaos X 3]

You did a really great job on this poem. I liked the way you manage to express your heartache, grief, and completely tell your story of love gone wrong. Plus it ryhmes, awesomely, I might add.

-Dawn marie

[DannyLynne Riley]

it is amazing how an aching of ones heart can transcribe so beautifuly when pen meets paper... the goal for most writers is to be able to bring the reader into the authors experience... to be transported into this written world...It is this experience we, as writers, strive to accomplish. This is the measuring stick of a gifted writer. nice read -DannyLynne

[deeps]

WOW! This blew me away, I like this write alot.
Such powerful emotion in this. Amazing!!

[iamcarolfierce]

very emotional and that 's how it should be.
it touched my heart and i could feel the pain felt by the writer..

[Drifter]

I like the repetition of "Damned am I". It makes the poem feel visceral (if only towards me) and draws out memories from my own failed loves. Still, the very first stanza feels a bit... well, it feels off. It just might be that first line. While, I understand what you're saying, it's just bugging me. Nevertheless, this is a good poem and I enjoyed it. So, well done!

Oh the lost felt from reading such a wonderful poem.
This pain is well known sadly, I know this one all too well.

Very good work, I greatly enjoyed reading this.