Love to Die for

One day my dear, you will find I am not here.

You will want me then, you will of then care.

 

Someday dear you will cry as you will call my name.

You will reach for my hand, but feel a dead man.

And sadly you will thin find that I didn't die in shame.

 

Someday the pain will leave me, and in it will I leave,

You for evermore shall see, my love to you was free.

 

Someday he will mistreat you,

and then you will think of me.

All the years we spent apart.

just to kill this, my lonely heart.

 

If you loved me then why did you wait so long to tell me?

For now my love is for ever gone, I aways loved you with glee.

For now I lay in my golden coffin and sleep as they carry me away.

To you I know you loved me just not that way, just now I most utterly pay.

Reviews

[Bear]

Critique: (For now my love is for ever gone) forever

Review: I am reminded that in the book of life, the chapter on relationships is the largest one. From it we learn how others have walked through the minefield of a relationship and survived even if some what mangled. You have just added another page to that chapter and hopefully others will take heed and learn from your experience and insights. Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[The Damned]

I love this
Its perfect
Its sad
But I absoulutly love it.

[Wolfwind Words]

A Highly emotionally charged piece you have here. The picture brings forth it's power ten fold. (I would suggest a mature rating for content of the picture.)
It's an ageles story of love lost in the time of the living, and people not knowing how much they actually cared about a person till that person was gone.
Yet, you have taken that story to a new level, as this isn't the lament of the living, but that of the soul of the dead. The haunting voice of a spirit gone. Saddened that only in death does the one they loved say the words they so needed to here in life.

A wonderfully tragic poem!
Aaron Maycroft

[Disco writer]

Loved the concept, but its rather a sad poem don't think? But I guess it's just as life was intended. Good job by putting emotions in love.