One Life

Oh, my youth

I was a child but I missed you

I had barrels of laughter

I cried wild and long rivers

But my love for friends and play

captured pleasant memories at the end of a day

In a flash it went years of teenager

In a mantle was my  intrigue by life and death

a philosopher for I was set

Alone, but never lonely

befriended words and ideas

family at heart, visions on mind

Now, just like You, I glide to end of time

Reviews

[James Glazier]

Powerful piece, really enjoyed it.

[Satoshi IroTzu]

I appreciate your honesty, and I am glad to see that you found it enjoyable.

[Bear]

I like the idea but have some problems with how you have it worded. In the second sentence, you didn't clarify who or what you missed. In the seventh sentence, (In a flash it went years of teenager) here you didn't clarify what IT was that when by. (In a mantle was my intrigue by life and death) I don't understand this sentence, mantle meaning "a loose, sleeveless cloak or cape" is that what you meant? And it should be "was I intrigued by life and death". (befriended words and ideas) should be "befriended by words and ideas". (family at heart, visions on mind) "visions on my mind" or "visions in my mind". (Now, just like You, I glide to end of time) to the end of time.
Polished up and this will be great :~)

[Satoshi IroTzu]

I appreciate your guidelines. I might edit it soon.

I hope to hear from you soon, Papa-Bear.

[ghostlyhearts]

Lovely work. I would love to go back to those carefree days.

[Satoshi IroTzu]

I am glad to read that you enjoyed it.