Third Eye

I gaze at the blue sky

a freedom  penetrating

wings of black dove

I taste

sun rays, melting in my mouth

a desire for salvation lifting my feet of the ground

Children screams

parents chatter

enjoying in an air of entrapment

their values forgotten

and scattered, forever taken to unknown lands

in orange beak of the white raven

Oh, I desire

so much I do desire

for a curse they carry

but lifted to sky I am

as I lay immobile in a hospital bed

doomed with the resonating truth, echoing in my head

Reviews

[Bala Gorthi]

In the first stanza, A desire for salvation lifting my feet of the ground..
And in the third, a desire for a curse they carry, and in between ..
people enjoying the entrapment, their values forgotten and scattered..,
A deep write here! I see a soul looking upward, and then the world reality and then the desire for the curse. Yes, the swing is understandable as the mundane has its own attraction....
A plight of soul swinging between two desires...
Well Satoshi, when the notch goes up... Our expectations will also rise.. Very Well done!
Keep it up.. And .. Thanks for this excellent piece..

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Respect, Bala

I`m glad to see, not only that you enjoyed reading, you enjoying my writing with a desire for more.

[Tabby Mac]

What a powerful poem! I've read it several times! This piece has depth on many levels. The ending especially makes me want to read it over and over. I enjoy the after thoughts as well, not only am I carried away in the sky to unknown lands while I read your piece it draws me as the reader out to think of others as well as personal hard times past.
I'm left feeling both grateful for my moment in life as well as compassion and empathy for those I know who are not as fortunate in theirs.
My heart has been tugged! Amazing write!! Can't wait to read other pieces of yours!
Tabby

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Respect, Tabby Mac

I`m glad that my poem had such an impact on you. Your reaction is one of the goals I have when I express myself through craft of writing.

I appreciate your constructive comment, and your honesty and time.

[Giulia King]

A well written poem! Excellent

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Respect, Gullia King

I`m glad you enjoyed reading it.