My Immortal Mind

For the 'Mind of the Immortal' contest.

The seasons come and go
Just as time ebbs and flows
My immortal eye,  ever watching
My immortal mind, ever longing

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I have seen many great things
Through many autumns and springs
My faith in man may ever change
My love and hate may ever remain

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Battles won in shadow and light
All by men who pay a heavy price
Rights won and earned by the free
For they are truly men redeemed

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All these things, I have always seen
My immortal eye, watching every scene
Through all time, I long for one thing
My immortal mind, an end to this eternity

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I have felt love come and go
As beauty remains and fades in the old
When the reaper comes for their lives
I wonder when will finally be my time

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Long since have I sated my curiosity
Now, many would regard me an atrocity
Though I hold no hate for mankind
I have no wish to die for the crime of life

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As the summer sun brings dawn
And the winter snows draw on
My immortal eye, ever spying
My immortal mind, ever tiring

Author's Note

Something that I cooked up for the 'Mind of the Immortal' contest. Feel free to comment and critique. ;)

Reviews

[Bard Constantine]

I enjoyed this piece, as it looked at the subject of immortality in the light of its downfalls as opposed to its benefits. If one were immortal, would it truly be all that advantageous to watch the world fade, and all those you care for suffer and die? Nicely done, and thanks for your entry...

[alexis]

ethan,
i liked this one a lot.it is really good

[Pradnya]

awesome work , as you said in your note you wrote this for a contest , i would suggest keep participating in all contest , cos your write great :)

[Lilly]

Great poem - I especially love the first stanza, effective start to the piece.
Also love the continuation / repetition in this poem.
Great work!

[Alicia Hirshey]

Beautifully written.