Insane Rain>??>

Just really trying to get back into poetry writing and don't wanna throw old stuff in (as I have changed a b it). Just typed this up trying to follow some kind of rhyme scheme but...i broke away haha.

 

I guess our last kiss in the rain

Is the main reason that I went insane?

Such a trivial moment to man,

And yet I won’t forget love’s plan.

 

You may have turned your back to passion.

And I may be seeking out disaster.

But please, have some compassion,

For all I wanted was to be your master.

 

Take control and take your heart,

Soon there would be no way you could part.

I thought I had you tied down so well,

Until you sunk away at the morning bell.

 

Glistening skies and rainbow shadows.

I shed these eyes to seek out fancies.

Touch, touch was all I ever gave her woes.

Now I’ll wander without my feeling.

Now I’ll wander without revealing

That I fought infinity.

Author's Note

Really seems kind of dull/ lame. Let me know if you agree. Really. It won't hurt my feelings ;)

Reviews

[Teenage poet]

It was not dull or lame. It was wonderful. I loved it. It was vivid and put a picture right into my head.