Turn of the Knife

Turn of the Knife

A Poem by David Lewis Paget

The sun sat up on the mountain top
And started to sink from view,
A shadow, spread on the valley floor
Was creeping over you,
You’d just told me that you’d had enough
In the shade of a chestnut tree,
And then I saw in your shrouded smile
That you meant you were through with me.

I didn’t know what I’d done to you,
I thought it was only love,
But then the shadow had covered you
From the mountain top above,
You pulled your hood up over your hair
And wrapped yourself in your cloak,
Said you were going to leave me there
Go off with some other folk.

Your words were cruel, and pierced my heart
I wasn’t aware I’d erred,
You acted as if we’d strayed apart,
There was someone you preferred,
We’d been together so long I thought
That no-one could take my place,
But since you’ve shown that I’m on my own
I’m afraid of losing face.

And so I lie in the Mulberry bush
And I wait to see him here,
His first embrace with the one I love
Will become his last, I fear,
I took the knife from the kitchen drawer
With a view to bring his end,
But now I see as he ventures near
That the cheating one’s my friend.

How could you take my friend from me
As you take yourself away,
It isn’t enough that I’m losing you
But my friend as well, today,
I’ll not be spilling his blood tonight
As I thought I’d surely do,
But all the anger and hurt I feel
Has turned the knife on you.

David Lewis Paget

© 2015 David Lewis Paget


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A wild and powerful tale in the poem my friend.
"I’ll not be spilling his blood tonight
As I thought I’d surely do,
But all the anger and hurt I feel
Has turned the knife on you."
I liked the twist at the ending. Thank you David for sharing your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Oh the joys of love and friendship bad combination.....

Posted 2 Years Ago


What a twist to this ending. Loved it. Great work, David.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thanks for sharing, its an outstanding piece

Posted 3 Years Ago


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You told this tale well, lost love cuts deeper than any knife. Love has no hilt on its blade, when it pierces it knows no depth. Thank you, Richie B.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

powerful emotions in this poem David, the twist in the tail done perfectly as always, a truly great story of love turning to hate :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A cruel sad write as Justice prevailed I think in the end lol A cracker of a yarn til the end full of surprises

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You could adapt this into lyrics for a song. It could work well.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Wow, Very vivid and powerful story poem. It reminds me of the old folk song "On the Banks of the Ohio" There was a version by Joan Baez but the song is older than her. I have played the song many times when I performed guitar and singing in bars.
Annie

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent writing. You capture a scenario here that seems to repeat itself through history. It seems as fate wants to double down on the tragedy of losing the one you love by adding another layer of grieve. Exponential hurt can bring insanity as you describe so well.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

love is a powerful entity, and youve captured that aspect quite well, please review my work too

Posted 3 Years Ago


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David Lewis Paget
David Lewis Paget

Moonta, South Australia, Australia



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