Skipping!

Well, it is the first of April....

A little girl was skipping;

As she swung her skipping rope

The neighbors heard her singing

And the song she sang was - Quote:

 

'Mummy's in the parlour

And she's there with Uncle Fred,

Daddy's in the garage

Says she's doing in his head,

Auntie Jane was crying

Now she's swimming in the pool

And I must keep on skipping

'Til it's time to go to school.'

 

The neighbors saw her skipping

All along the afternoon,

She skipped a hundred singles

As she sang her little tune:

 

'Mummy's saying nothing

But she hasn't any clothes,

Uncle Fred is staring

With a chopper through his nose,

Auntie Jane is floating

But her face is turning black

And Daddy's in the garage

With a rope around his neck.'

 

A little girl was skipping

But there wasn't any sound,

I guess she'll still be skipping

When the sun goes down…

 

David Lewis Paget

Reviews

[Collette]

Haha, you did an excellent job making light of a nasty situation. I especially like the nursery rhyme feel of this piece. It's done in such a sing-song manner, yet, the content is extremely heavy. The balance in this poem provides all sorts of stimulation for the reader: it's fun to read and still socially relavent. Excellent job my friend, I wouldn't change a thing. :)

[THE [ME]GEAN]

This poem reminds me of the songs we use to sing when we were kids. The ones we never knew the meaning of. Like Rock A Bye Baby or Ring Around the Rosy. Its so horrible and yet you cant help but like it. The poem itself needed no correction what so ever. It was simple in words and yet scarily dark and profound in context. Good job. You're a very dark writer.

[Steve Thompson]

I like something with a nice smooth feel to it, than a quick nasty smack layered on. Well done, I enjoyed the read and it was very interesting. Thanks for sending it to me :)

[Norma J. Jessee]

Excellent write on a tragic subject. This poem really has that jump rope rhythm. I can just see the little girl jumping rope to this. So innocent while all the tragedy goes on.

Love this creepy, yet it has a lilt to it that makes it fun to read.

[James Takeo Panton]

This is playful sounding, yet very dark....you know that I always enjoy your writing style, but this is my fave!

[Chad Wesley Allbrett]

I agree, creepy and yet lighthearted somehow at the same time!

[Kara Emily Krantz]

oh boy. what a piece this is. LOL somehow you managed a great rhyme scheme, and a morbid humor and lightness at the same time. ha.

nice piece. happy april fools day. :P

[Tania Leigh]

Your trademark tempo adds even more of an eerie feel to this chilling write.The dialogue of the little girl is perfect, and the open ending makes me wish the poem wasn't over.

Another brilliant piece. I am a huge fan.