My Last Words To You

one of my incomplete pieces :l

-No name-

Left with this feeling of icy depression,

 In this letter lies my confession.

Screaming down the gates of hell

 Letting myself be consumed by the same spell;

Wishing that all of this would come to an end.

 Living in a lonely world without a friend.

Sweep me down in a wave of your bitter judgment;

…………………[need to add something here]…………………

Ive done what I needed too do,

everything I did I did for you.

 No matter what is said, no matter what is done;

‘I love you , I love you’  

Reviews

[AndyJCash]

Your missing line, maybe "Down through this painful biting decent" something along those lines. Whatever you decide to, what you have is good, with great imagery and a good rhyming scheme. Good job :)

[nothingnothingforgetfor..]

coming along nicely, maybe im just crazy but i imagine myself in some sort of frigid ice cave when i read this.