Let me Free

As the sun starts to set,

That's when we first met.

You don't like the sun,

You said its no fun.

The night is exciting and free,

You say its just for you... and me.

You want me to follow,

We jump into the tree's truck hollow.

Falling and screaming,

Your smile is evil and scheming. 

I ask to go back, I want to stop playing,

Kicking, screaming, flaying.

You grip tighter its hard to breath,

Any longer with you and we'll be dancing with death.

The more I struggle the bigger you grow,

Fear is real, and you seem to know.

My fears are alive they keep me silent,

they become more aggressively violent.

Suddenly, we've stopped your smile fades away,

You retreat deeper inside, fearing the warm suns ray.

Covered in sweat and exhausted from fear,

I'm afraid to sleep, knowing your presence is so near.

If I don't sleep you'll leave me alone,

I sit still, deep inside a deprived sleep zone.

I've lost so much sleep no pills or medication,

The world can't help me, I am controlled by my deprivation.

Reviews

[A.marie.speaks]

The beginning reminded me of Alice falling down the rabbit hole. Your imagery is strong and dark. I really liked the end lines, the last 2 stanzas. And also: "My fears are alive they keep me silent, they become more aggressively violent." Great piece!

[Riley]

"tree's truck hollow." did you mean tree TRUNK hollow? sorry just wondering if that was your intention or not. Very creative and mysterious. You sound almost like a deer in the headlights, the most terrifying reaction a body can have. Great work! I love this creativity that you ooze :) keep it going!!!

[lostnstars]

I'm in love on how you written it, and the flow is just simply beautiful. Lastly, I love how you write the comparison of both sides. Please keep on writing, you're amazing :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot of wild thoughts and journey in your words.
"My fears are alive they keep me silent,
they become more aggressively violent."
Struggle, drugs and walls stop us from seeing the realness of life. I liked the poetry. You made me think tonight. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Bohrium Guy]

Your visual attack to the imagery was well rounded and your display of emotions were excellent. Your created a good piece that describes the haunts and darkness in thoughts. Great write my friend! Thanks for sharing this piece.

~Rob~