The Five Seven Five Slide... ;)

A Series Of Senryus that I have written some time ago....I first said Haiku... because it is a type of one.... but a friend reminded me that it is indeed a senryus . Thank you for reading

Winds of change blow by

Through my hair into my heart

Now it is welcomed

Just let go tonight

The moon will carry you through

The darkest of nights

All the lines are there

For you to reach out and take

any time you want

Sounds of the night dance

Shaking the foundation strong

Will stop the silence

My eyes are heavy

The slumbering winds call me

Cozy is my bed

A Series Of Senryus By: Debbie Mills Kelly ( Debbie Philly)

Author's Note

These are a Series Of senryus that I have written some time ago.. Thank you for reading :)

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Lovely Haikus and Senryus...whatever they are classified. Lol. :)
Actually the 1st, 2nd and 4th stanzas can be considered as Haikus because they are about nature like the moon, the wind, and the night. But they can be called senryus, too because there is an emotion in each stanza. The 3rd and the 5th are totally senryus because they talk about other things and how you feel (5th).
But since this is only one poem, this will be called series of senryus. And I love this 5x because I am fascinated with each stanza which can stand alone as a beautiful haiku or senryu if ever you separate them.

You're an awesome writer. Keep it up! :)

[Debbie_Philly]

Wow thank you so much Dhaye.... that means so much... i did write them at different times ans then decided to put it together :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the first two especially struck me---

nice use of this form...

i like short and sweet...

i do haiku and senyru sometimes and it is the only form i ever try to fit my words into.

a challenge for sure.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you Jacob.... Yea Im not one for form either but I was playing around with them and I do like that Style best in from :)

[Frieda P]

They all compile to make a whole, and they also stand alone quite nicely, good job.

Sounds of the night dance
Shaking the foundation strong
Will stop the silence

Love this one....

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Frieda !! :) Nice to meet you !!

[Frieda P]

Same here, my pleasure ;-)

[zainul]

String of wonderful senryus with words like wind,heart,night,moon,sound and silence made me so happy and emotional.
Penned well.

[Debbie_Philly]

Awww Zainul....Thank you so much for such a kind review !!! I will be over to read more of you as well my friend !! :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome,lovely friend:)
You have a surprise.
Please proceed on and enjoy:)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

all fit into the other like a set of bricks
walled from withen and without
mortar and glue
left in the center is the creator
the architect new..
ordering the foremen about...
not I not them its you

[Debbie_Philly]

WOW Thank you very much... each one was written at different times so its great to know that they fit together so well after all the time in between :) Thank you for reading

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

yes miss

[Steve]

You did well here. :0)

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you very much Steve :)

[Relic]

I like all of them though I wasn't sure what the lines were referring to in the third one. Nice writing.

[Debbie_Philly]

I think the third one was written is responds to another poets words one night... and I dont remember them now, but I saved my portions... ;) Thank you again for reading

[Relic]

No problem.

[Dr. Wood ?]

i love trying out the haiku/ senryu format bit never really understand which is which..you have done a pretty good job here

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you very much Dr ;) I thought it was a Haiku... but cowboy pointed out that although the lines are right... really haiku's are about nature.... and I looked that up hes right... :) Thank you very much again for reading !!

[Dr. Wood ?]

I bow to the cowboy......WHoops...me hat fell off

[Debbie_Philly]

;)

[Jack...]

This is beautiful, a nice flowing collection of senryu poetry. I love how they move seemlessly into one another, almost as if they could be placed in any order and still arrive at the same wonderful conclusion. Very beautiful Debbie.

[Debbie_Philly]

Awwww Thank you very much Jack... that means allot ...:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Well technically these are senryus... they have the same syllable count but haikus are about nature all others are senryus...

anyways with that being said I enjoyed these very much...

but this is my fav...

Just let go tonight
The moon will carry you through
The darkest of nights

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you Cowboy..... I was going by the Japanese rule of 5,7,5 syllables but on further thought after you said this your right, Japanese haiku's are about nature... ;)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

But they are still senryus and very good ones at that.

[Debbie_Philly]

Yes your right.... I should change the description. :) Thank you !!