Light the torch of shakespear

Wisdom is not in everyone's hold. Those who have it spread it to the world and beyond.

Search into your own heart
And move the crazy orbits
Of fears so horrid
Open your mind and let it yield
And give out the best of whispering
Loiter around your heart
And ponder in wonder
Move into the thoughtful trance
Get your fact aligned
Get it ordered
Compact
Be inspired
And then you will be on the mark
Now you get the big instance
So light the torch of shakespear
And let it burst out in bright flare
And then get it brighter
The bright light to circle the universe
And make a whisper
Of a new message at large
And the smoke
Let it opt for the sky
And let it spread around the world
Carrying the message of shakespear
A hope for the one quitting
A dream for the one lacking
A strength for the witless
And shine for the ones in shadow
The soothing words of the message
A remembrance of the archaic
A symbol of wisdom of old age
A re-ignition of poetry in hearty state
Mark my word
Thou shall not know
Thy hath it in you
Your very own heart
Whence everything originates
That is the message
It tells so much
Of what a heart can say
If only you will listen to it.

Reviews

[Clarisse Nanoit]

A hope for the one quitting
A dream for the one lacking
A strength for the witless
And shine for the ones in shadow
The soothing words of the message
A remembrance of the archaic
A symbol of wisdom of old age
A re-ignition of poetry in hearty state
Mark my word


I loved this part. I also enjoyed the part where you began to speak in old English to get across the strength of your point, but it would have been more effective if you had used it more correctly. And as Ffion said, Shakespeare is spelled with an e at the end. It was a journey from beginnging to end, though, and I enjoyed it overall. =) Thanks for sharing, friend.
KH

[Dead_End]

Amazing buddy!!!!!!!! keep writing!!!!!!!!!

[Therene]

Yes, the Shakespeare without an 'e' is a bit disturbing but I didn't really affect my overall rating of this one.

This is truly inspirational. Line by line, it flowed smoothly. Very creative 'twisting' of words. It all made everything come together.

*Cheers for Shakespeare.* :D

[Abd-afeez]

Thank you everyone. F ffion davies i'll do the punctuation when i edit the poem. Am Sorry about the name its not an error but its like the rightful way i'd known it to be spelt.
And the idea of the sonnet may be you are right. However i think writing is more of showing your emotion on paper and doing it in a perfect way you think you can paint the picture without a disaster. If i'd known more about sonnet i'd have opt for that. Since i however don't i think i tried to deliver my message in my own little way.

[Ffion Davies]

great images and powerful lines in this poem but i'm afraid i have a few niggly comments.

1. Shakespeare is spelt with an e on the end - this really distracted me! I think he deserves his name spelt correctly.

2. Punctuation is needed - I know your intention was for the poem to flow but instead of a smooth running poem like a stream it was more like a water out of a tap.

3. Maybe you should consider writing a sonnet as this is what Shakespeare was famed for, it'll give you structure to work with too.

Great idea though, well done!

[emmajoy]

This flows so smoothly, like a gentle stream, full of wonderful hopes, full of wonderful phrases .. such wisdom indeed ..

'The bright light to circle the universe
And make a whisper
Of a new message at large ..'

You mix language style in this, modern and traditional .. 'have' and 'hath' for instance, might be a good idea to use only the one..


Fine writing, my friend.

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. So many powerful lines. I can't write what is best in this poem. Whole poem was a mind opening read. Thank you.
Coyote